How uncanny. How you've weaved your words in such a classy manner, along with a wistful and reflective ambiance, but by way of a veiled meaning, have awfully charmed me. Nice use of assonance and internal rhymes, whereas I still have to decipher what's in between the lines. Take care. ~Marian
Wow dude, fleeting image what a view that you put out,
today after a while i read a poem by you, and what i found is that, now you are one of those writiers, who improved 100 % since the moment i read ur first poem here... now your poetry techniced are something that other poetry lovers should check out to learn from it, you have mastered what it takes to be called a POET with all quality. I am so glad that i read this poem of you.keep in touch.
I think it's cool. I like it. Your poems are so short. That's not a bad thing though I'm just use to reading and writing longer things. I give you a five as usual. By the way thank you soooo much for checking out Thoughs of the Mindless.
I"m sorry that it took me so long to finally comment on this poem but it took me a while to understand it, even still I'm having a little bit of trouble. I really liked the way that it was written though very different. You have a way with free verse poems where it just comes naturally to you. Well done.
Although the poem was short I found it to be very well written, the imagery was amazing and so was the word choice. The flow grabs the reader and doesn't let them go, fantastic job with this piece 5/5 GG23