Your Dark Eyes Match Your Soul (Double Triolet)

To me with sounds almost like an abusive relationship. Where things start out great in the beginning but then quickly change.I think that my favourite line had to be the last one because I took it to mean that the person in this poem finally realised what they were getting into and left before it got to bad. Sort of like a happy ending, you could say. Such an interesting style that you picked and while most of the times repeating lines drive me crazy you picked the perfect lines to enhance. I feel that when the lines are spoken the second time and the third time you don't feel bored cause you've read them all you feel embraced because it gives the poem more structure and shows the true ability of the author. Thanks for sharing this with us, you did a fantastic job.

I know you said interpret this as you want. I dont know whether you want to know how we interpret it. I think of it as a rape. Which other people probably do also. It was a fancinating poem with no real answer or even question quite mysterious actually i liked it. xxx alex xxx

This is a very good poem

You had great description. i think that the poem was very very powerful and deep. you definatly thought about this one before it put it on here. the flow was perfect. if one line was missing it would not make the poem

thsi poem made my day..

keep writing

Great poem!
Soul as cold as ice, eyes like the darkest night sky
^this line is very POWERFUL
Wording is excellent, topic is also very interesting. You wrote this piece superbly. It really deserves 5/5