Fantastic!
I love the description you used. I particuallarly(sp?) love this style of poetry. And applaud you for doing different formant's than free verse.
This peice was well written, it flowed nicely, and the words where just beautiful in a dark way.
Amazing.
Elaine.

You really did a fantastic job with this piece, the imagery is amazing and the word choice and flow as well. I love the title and how his dark eyes match his dark soul, amazing job 5/5 GG23

Excellent bit of writing!

I loved this. you put excellent details into it. i loved this line "Soul as cold as ice, eyes like the darkest night sky" i think it was an excellent one to repeat. that line alone has wonderful imagery and the similies are amazing. wonderful WINDERFUL job on this. 5/5.

Nice....
Keep up the good work :-)

Another beautifully penned poem! I think it was perfect, the flow, choice of words.. Everything ^_^

Soul as cold as ice, eyes like the darkest night sky
^^I really adore those lines. I can really imagine it and feel the 'coldness' xD

Overall a perfect 5/5! as always! :)

I love reading triolets, and yours was no exception. :)

"Finding out the real you such a surprise" = either you meant to put 'was' between 'you' and 'such', or you meant to use a comma. Either way, it sounds wrong with what it is just now. I suggest changing that.

Apart from that, however, this was a very dark poem, which I enjoyed reading a lot.

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I love the way it flows. You are truly talented.

Wow! that was an amazing poem! the words you used really captured me right until the end. The only thing i would say is that 'Finding out the real you such a surprise' didnt really make sense to me. But other than that i loved your poem, it was well written, deffinalty a dark write. 5/5 from me..
tC
Kirsty
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I thought it was a very good poem

exept in the first stanza there was one part

in the first stanza where the rhyme seemed a little forced

but i thought it was amazing

"Soul as cold as ice, eyes like the darkest night sky
Now I know your eyes match your murderous soul
Smiling when you hear the saddest of cries"

most favorite part ^^

55/5 great job

Loved this poem (=

Once again, an amazing poem but triolets are eight syllables per line, but you've captured a lot of emotion into this =)
So well done on that aspect, it's just the format needs changing =)
*Gem*

Great poem!
Soul as cold as ice, eyes like the darkest night sky
^this line is very POWERFUL
Wording is excellent, topic is also very interesting. You wrote this piece superbly. It really deserves 5/5

You had great description. i think that the poem was very very powerful and deep. you definatly thought about this one before it put it on here. the flow was perfect. if one line was missing it would not make the poem

thsi poem made my day..

keep writing

This is a very good poem

I know you said interpret this as you want. I dont know whether you want to know how we interpret it. I think of it as a rape. Which other people probably do also. It was a fancinating poem with no real answer or even question quite mysterious actually i liked it. xxx alex xxx

To me with sounds almost like an abusive relationship. Where things start out great in the beginning but then quickly change.I think that my favourite line had to be the last one because I took it to mean that the person in this poem finally realised what they were getting into and left before it got to bad. Sort of like a happy ending, you could say. Such an interesting style that you picked and while most of the times repeating lines drive me crazy you picked the perfect lines to enhance. I feel that when the lines are spoken the second time and the third time you don't feel bored cause you've read them all you feel embraced because it gives the poem more structure and shows the true ability of the author. Thanks for sharing this with us, you did a fantastic job.