Comments : The Missing Piece of my Heart

  • 10 years ago

    by Birgit

    AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAW
    This is so adorable! =D I really loooovvveee this part: "Can you feel the angels, they're watching us."
    =) Sometimes feel like that too, when I'm with my bf..Something/one that's just saying it's so right. =) Anyway, beautiful poem! Keep it up!
    xxx

  • 10 years ago

    by lisa

    Wow so beautiful hun.i loved it!!!great use of words to.this was an amazing piece x

  • 10 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Awwwwww. i almost teared in this poem. Great job. Being that it's a 15 minute poem I can't say what you should change. It's cliche, but that's the only thing I can think of that you could change, but thats the whole point!

    5/5.

  • 10 years ago

    by WiNgS Of StEeL

    Omg..wonderful poem thi s is...just brilliant:D

    i especially like this line
    "Because God knows that I will find the other piece in your heart"

    that is so true and ive never thought of it that way...
    you have such an a wonderful way with words...u can express them so well..
    keep up the gr8 work

    tk care bree
    :D:D

  • 10 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    Beautiful free verse you penned here, you express them within beautiful emotions written, just simply but beautiful done! "Do not dismiss your dreams. To be without dreams is to be without hope. To be without hope is to be without purpose. Do not run through life so fast that you forget not only where you have been, but also where you are going. Life is not a race, but a journey to be savored each step of the way. "Remember that silence is sometimes the best answer."

    Keep them coming, Best wishes.

  • 10 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I really enjoyed this poem I thought it was very well written, the word choice and the flow were very sweet and heartfelt. You really did a fantastic job with this poem, Excellent work 5/5 GG23

  • 10 years ago

    by firexdancer

    This was really sweet, so heartfelt and touching and it made me smile. it really is a beautiful poem, and it has little details that make it that way. 5/5
    gabriella

  • 10 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Wow sir,
    you have done a brillent job in 15 minutes. i really liked the poem, the contest and the style of it. you are great, keep it up

  • 10 years ago

    by Molly Elizabeth

    This poem is so cute! Well done!! :-) You can tell it comes from the heart and is very meaningful to you... which is the best kind of poetry as far as i'm concerned... it's just beautiful! Keep writing I look forward to reading more of your work!

  • 10 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    15 minute but it was wonderful. Such passion and breathtakeing words to say to the one perosn that you love. You could really feel the love and the emotions in this poem. Well done. God Bless 5/5
    <3Tay

  • 10 years ago

    by ForeverYoung

    Wow!
    That is so beautiful.
    So full of emotion, it was really wonderful to read.
    I really love
    'I whispered, "Your eyes are the window to your heart..
    "And your tears are a proof that you have one."'
    beautiful work keep it up.
    5/5 from me.

    `Steph

  • 10 years ago

    by LuvLyLynn

    WOW!!! this blew me up... ^_^ it was sweet, cute, and very well written... I usually like rhyming but this one I enjoyed reading very much...I like the flow and the emotion it had... this is a masterpiece lol...keep up the good work and i look forward to reading more of your work... ^_^ I love the ending

    "Because God knows I will find the other piece in your heart"...

    To me that would be a kilig moment...

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    OH
    This is beautiful...made me all teary eyed damnit! =D
    The opening was beautiful, I loved the way you captured the essence of a first kiss and dragged the reader right in simutaneously.
    The imagery portrayed in this piece is breathtaking, as are the emotion and depth behind the words.

  • 10 years ago

    by X2892

    This was great.. no excellent love poem i loved how u used the words in this poem, now this is true love, 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Mihaela

    This is the poem I like the most and please don't stop writing them!!! Any boy can make a girl feel special by reading this poem....Keep on the good work and take good care of u!!*Hugs*Hugs*Hugs*

  • 10 years ago

    by Mihaela

    This was the idea of the comment...To make u smile :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    Nice one! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    The Imagery was amzing. It put me in tear's.
    The emotion's seepes through each and every heartfelt word.
    Your work is flawless.
    I absolutely loved it!.
    Adorable.
    Elaine.

  • 10 years ago

    by Monica AKA Mika

    This is so beautiful i really just love this poem to death...it is just one of those peoms that make you think..like this line>>>"I whispered, "Your eyes are the window to your heart..
    "And your tears are a proof that you have one."
    "God gave us two feet, two hands, two ears and two eyes.."
    But only one heart.. I came closer to her and said..

    "Because God knows that I will find the other piece in your heart"

    ^^^^That just killed me i just wanted to cry and read it all over again...keep writting and send me a message everytime you write a new poem! I love you!

  • 10 years ago

    by Kayla

    Marc this was an amazingly beautiful poem. Not only was your poem wonderful, but so is the title... that is definitely what caught my eye and I just had to read this! It does not surprise me at all that you have gotten so many comments on this and rates, it's a fantastic poem! It was so full of love and you really expressed the characters feelings in this. Great job dear, please keep up the awesome work!! I hope to read more beautiful creations from you. 5/5 <3 <3 <3

    ~Loveless Nights~