This is so adorable! =D I really loooovvveee this part: "Can you feel the angels, they're watching us."
=) Sometimes feel like that too, when I'm with my bf..Something/one that's just saying it's so right. =) Anyway, beautiful poem! Keep it up!
Awwwwww. i almost teared in this poem. Great job. Being that it's a 15 minute poem I can't say what you should change. It's cliche, but that's the only thing I can think of that you could change, but thats the whole point!
Beautiful free verse you penned here, you express them within beautiful emotions written, just simply but beautiful done! "Do not dismiss your dreams. To be without dreams is to be without hope. To be without hope is to be without purpose. Do not run through life so fast that you forget not only where you have been, but also where you are going. Life is not a race, but a journey to be savored each step of the way. "Remember that silence is sometimes the best answer."
This poem is so cute! Well done!! :-) You can tell it comes from the heart and is very meaningful to you... which is the best kind of poetry as far as i'm concerned... it's just beautiful! Keep writing I look forward to reading more of your work!
15 minute but it was wonderful. Such passion and breathtakeing words to say to the one perosn that you love. You could really feel the love and the emotions in this poem. Well done. God Bless 5/5
That is so beautiful.
So full of emotion, it was really wonderful to read.
I really love
'I whispered, "Your eyes are the window to your heart..
"And your tears are a proof that you have one."'
beautiful work keep it up.
5/5 from me.
WOW!!! this blew me up... ^_^ it was sweet, cute, and very well written... I usually like rhyming but this one I enjoyed reading very much...I like the flow and the emotion it had... this is a masterpiece lol...keep up the good work and i look forward to reading more of your work... ^_^ I love the ending
"Because God knows I will find the other piece in your heart"...
This is beautiful...made me all teary eyed damnit! =D
The opening was beautiful, I loved the way you captured the essence of a first kiss and dragged the reader right in simutaneously.
The imagery portrayed in this piece is breathtaking, as are the emotion and depth behind the words.
This is so beautiful i really just love this poem to death...it is just one of those peoms that make you think..like this line>>>"I whispered, "Your eyes are the window to your heart..
"And your tears are a proof that you have one."
"God gave us two feet, two hands, two ears and two eyes.."
But only one heart.. I came closer to her and said..
"Because God knows that I will find the other piece in your heart"
^^^^That just killed me i just wanted to cry and read it all over again...keep writting and send me a message everytime you write a new poem! I love you!
Marc this was an amazingly beautiful poem. Not only was your poem wonderful, but so is the title... that is definitely what caught my eye and I just had to read this! It does not surprise me at all that you have gotten so many comments on this and rates, it's a fantastic poem! It was so full of love and you really expressed the characters feelings in this. Great job dear, please keep up the awesome work!! I hope to read more beautiful creations from you. 5/5 <3 <3 <3