I liked it ,you were writing what is in your heart and thats what makes it good.Well done.

The poem is great with its own unique style and quality. I REALLY worth your efforts and appreciate you for the beautiful love poem. tc

I could tell, the emotions where straight from your heart.
Not many would space out the lines out, but it just gives a unique quality to your poem.
I thought you did a beautiful job.

Keep it up,
Elaine.

This is truly greatly written poem.
you have done this so greatly, keep it up dear.

Again, good poem. The ending was powerfull, thought the whole poem was filled with deep feelings. Flow and rhyming was great!

5/5

I think this poem would be better if put into stanzas, but that is just me. A very lovely deep poem. It made me say awww. 5/5

Awww beautifuly written well done dont change a thing :)

You're a great writer.5/5

I liked how you ended on a somewhat hopeful note, although the fact that you spaced out your lines kind of threw me off.
Apart from that however, I thought this was beautiful.

I like this poem a lot cuz i can completly relate wit my current relationship...i might just have my man read this...again wit your name on it ..lol your talented like i said and congrats on being a mother...thanks for commenting mine..and good luck in life...God Bless

The spaces make a little harder to read and there's an extra "i" here,
"so i can i show my love for you."
Also I like to see proper capitalization in a poem, but that's just me.
Overall, the rhyme scheme was beautiful and even with the space it had a nice flow. Nice read.

marcella

This poem is good..but i really think you shouldnt space out the lines...it really makes the poem hard to read....my suggestion would be to put it into stanzas...it would be an easier read.

That is just so sweet

Your emotions where strong but i really dont think you should space out the lines its difficult to read. other than that it was very good! keep it up!

MickeysBabyGurl

A good poem, I particularly loved the lines "I will be your queen and also your slave" It shows an interesting contradiction of a relationship. Good work!

You write whats in your heart, and thats what makes your poems so good, it flows well, and the emotion really comes through, really well!