Comments : Radios and paper hearts

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Very unique and creative, greatly written with such powerful imagery. My favorite lines are:

    -Let the words flow from the radio, make the silence go away
    emotions blasted through the speakers, with every word they say.

    Lets cut out paper hearts again, and scatter them on the floor
    for a valentine who doesn't care, and a girl who's loved no more.-
    ^ Amazing and totally original.

    Keep up, 5/5 from me

  • 16 years ago

    by ghosts in bloom

    Very interesting and intriguing style, I love the caesura you used -- very fitting. This has a gentle musicality to it, that was superb! Only one spot tripped up for me:

    "The DJ plays her favorite song, that reminds her of a guy,
    the song she cries to every night, as she replays their goodbye."

    The second line seems to run on too far,
    and in my opinion reads smoother as:
    The song she cries to every night,
    replaying their goodbye.

    Just a suggestion.
    Overall, a great piece!

    Take Care,
    Smiles,
    *N

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautifully Nothing

    Wow! amazing poem! i'm so sorry i didn't get to these sooner, i have been really busy with work, school and family issues. i'm glad i finally got some time because you are an amazing writer! the rhymes are right on and this poem really does make a picture in your head. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet Disposition

    Very good 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by unblue skye

    Amazing, :D
    Very strong, and bleeding emotion.
    Good flow, and great choice of words.
    It was excellent.
    5/5.
    Very different, but wonderful! =]]
    Great job...
    Keep writing!!

    --**Skye~