Omg wow!!..the ending was awesome!!.....
at least i know ur no virgin writer hea:P
keep it up
x

That was simple and powerful... yes-- beautiful ending. I really liked the concept of how it seems like a fantasy (we all have them).

Oh and thnx for commenting on my poems. I'm glad you liked it and I always check out the poety and profile of those who comment. Thnx again. :)

Wonderful poem.
Sad ending, but beautiful.
Full emotions.
Hope she's yours one day.
Great piece of writing.
Take care

Er.. This might happen to me in the future.. But anyway It was sweet but sad at the end
:( I was smiling and when I saw the end.. Well it was sad.. :(

Anyway flow was smooth, I like the imagery in it, well done.

Wow, i really enjoyed this poem. amazing job. i definitely got chills reading it, i could just picture it all happening, didn't expect that ending, but i loved it! great job!
keep up the good work
5/5
-Sami

Awwww that last line made me cry!!! :'( but it's sooo beautiful! I'm sorry if I'm using so much exclamation marks but it's true!!! I swear I can't read your work without my jaw dropping... kudos :)

Much better, i like this one a lot, except the last line isn't very strongly composed, maybe try something like, you awaken to realize she's yet to be yours. just a suggestion, but a much better read. great job 5/5

Awww!I love the ending.Keep up the amazing work.

<3Amber

This was so beautifully written. So much imagery I could invision what was taking place. BEAUTIFUL!

This is wonderful. so sweet and many of us can relate to it. I felt so much emotion in this poem, i think you did a great job. keep up the great work. 5/5

Thats so sweet and the ending is kind of sad it almost made me shed a tear 5/5 for a truly inspiring piece

Great! I do not have better words for this gorgeous creation!

Omg that gave me goosebumps! i remember that feeling, thank you, i just relived that moment, it was beautiful. you worded it so carefully and so descriptively, it flowed beautifully and just rolled right off the tongue, wonderful job.

I ove it cept for the sad bit at the end that happened to me =(

U amaze me.

xoxTaylor