Comments : Incomplete without you (Part III)

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    I agree a 100% with Samantha.
    It's amazing how you never lost the original flow or rythmatic emotions. Everything stayed the same and came together a for a spectacular ending.
    Very memorable.
    Love your work.
    Elaine.
    5/5 there's just no way I could give you less.

  • 16 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    There's no greater pain then being apart from the person you love so much. Great word choice and flow as always and the imagery was perfect. Excellent work 5/5 GG23

  • 16 years ago

    by Malini Nair

    Whoah reli cool poem,three sequels were gr8,i liked sum lines in this 1 ,it was touching in sum ways..cud relate to it...awww brought tears to my eyes reli!!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    Beautiful sad poems you penned here, flow well within beautiful expression emotions..... Love never promises instant gratification, only ultimate fulfillment. Love realizes and accepts that there will be disagreements and disturbing emotions... There may be times when miles lay between, but love is a commitment. It believes, and endures all things. have a good day, best wishes. Bert.

  • 16 years ago

    by Kirsty palmer

    That was a beautifully written poem, the promises that were made in the poem, although sad and heartfelt, they were also poeticly written. I can really relate to this poem, as your friend shares my felings as i am also in the same possision! send her my love!

    Truely great poem though!

    kirsty xXx

  • 16 years ago

    by SeXiSaMi

    This was an amazing poem. i absolutely loved it.. just in the 3rd stanza.. is that supposed to be "only one" or am i just reading it differently?
    either way, it was well written, very sad, but i loved it.
    and i am sorry to hear about that (im assuming this is all true) how all goes the way you wish it to be
    5/5
    <3 Sami

  • 16 years ago

    by hiddenimage

    Wow...this is an amazing poem. its very emotional. i like. 5/5 :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    "It hurts a lot to see you express
    Your love to someone else
    My heart is torn apart
    And it's a broken heart"

    worst pain one can ever feel...as sad as it is to read, its an amazing poem..i love how your rhyme scheme changed up a bit in every stanza..you kept it interesting right until the last line..keep up the great work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Kristina

    Line 11 : "You were the only who could ever" I think you meant --You were the only ONE who could ever--

    Line 15 : "My life would remain incomplete" I think it should be "will" not "would"

    the ending wasnt that good, the beggining was great, then towards the end it seemed like you forced the rhyming, again, like you did in the first. but good job! 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 16 years ago

    by Angie

    Well, I do hope the young lady appreciates your writing this for her. I know I do, thanks for sharing such a loving and heartfelt story with us. You wrote it beautifully.

  • 16 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Nice ending. Theonly thing I'd fix is the forced rhyming, and how some parts dont rhyme. i give this one a 4, but the others received 5s.

    still, i enjoyed these poems. =]

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    I thought the ending was good

    and i agree with some of the others ahead of me ^^

    that some of your rhyming seemed forced

    and i hope the person you wrote this for

    apreciates it because this is very good

    again, 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by luv Shelbz luv

    Rlly like it and the ending so very good. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Hope

    Ohh!! I love it...Im lost for words. you're good at what you do, keep up the good work

  • 16 years ago

    by JaMeS

    Nice job but i would change the and its a broken heart to now its a broken heart that was a good trio well done the only fault was one word lol top marks!!

  • 16 years ago

    by lesbian hehe

    Wow i love how u can take a story and put it into a poem i love it

  • 16 years ago

    by ruth

    Its awesome :))))

  • 16 years ago

    by TwiztidJuggalette

    My love will remain intact
    Just for you and in fact
    I will wait for a day
    You'll come, never to go away

    ^^ I like those....Very good poem...

    You expressed this is so much beauty...

    5/5...

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I really have enjoyed reading this poem. I have also read the other two and all three pieces were as equally as good as the other. I'm sure the person you wrote this series of poems for really appeciates them. Well done on creating another beautiful poem. ~mel

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