Would You Still Try

by JaMeS   Jul 18, 2007


What would you do
if you were stuck watching your life crumble,
if you were forced to just stand back,

what would you say
if people where disappearing all around,
if loneliness struck a deep chord,
if you were left to cry,

would you scream,
scream out at life around,
make it heard the unbearable pain within,

or would you lash out,
striking at the hell your locked into
at the protectors of the gates to a better place,
could you climb the wall of the damned
knowing you'll never reach the top,
knowing the other side doesn't want you,
would you still try?

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  • 16 years ago

    by Hebe

    Great poem.
    Really deep.
    I think I would do whatever I can, my very best.
    What about you?
    Anyway, a great piece of writing.
    Take care

  • 16 years ago

    by WiNgS Of StEeL

    Boi u cant teach me how to write like thit n e day lol....ahah show me ur ways!!
    brilliant write as usual

    keep it up
    x

  • 16 years ago

    by Marie

    You're really good... this poem really put me in the view of the writer (whether it was intended to be you i don't know) and it really made me think. I love it so much.. don't ever stop writing

  • 16 years ago

    by sara

    WOW! this is a really powerful poem ur really talented 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by GretaInsideOut

    Wow, really powerful piece, I really like the repetition, it creates a sense of tension.
    Well done, Greta xx

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