As a cloud

by Marius Laun   Jul 24, 2007


To be as careless
as a cloud
not a care in the world
Only the heavens are loud

To float above
the world so high
And simply watch
The land move by

Having not a care in the world
or a thought in my head
Life being peaceful and quiet
Like being surrounded by the dead

To see the land from up above
Just like the angels who
Give us their love

To be as carefree as a cloud
Floating close to the heavens
Where darkness can't shroud

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  • 16 years ago

    by WrittenInTheStars

    The rhymes seem so forced. I think this would be better if you wrote it in free verse. It doesn't always have to rhyme. But I think that the message of this poem was enough to score it a 5/5 from me.

  • 16 years ago

    by Alexa Eudis

    This is cute! i love it! clouds rock

  • 16 years ago

    by Tara

    I liked the way your poem made me feel - a great write! Thanks for sharing :) Tara

  • 16 years ago

    by nikki

    Lol. i want to float away on a cloud. i loved it, it was awesome. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by fvalconbridge

    This is beautiful and I noticed all of your poems have very beautiful names as well. thank for commenting mine. I'm going to go do a few more of your, i really enjoyed this. It would be nicwe to return the favour but not necessary.

    5/5

    x

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