Now, It is about time you have written another poem, as I have been waiting to review your pieces for awhile now. You know how I love reading this style it is definitly one of my favorites. This showed such great beauty and talent. Definitly a gorgeous piece. Emotions portrayed so strong and in depth.
Marian this is great! The uniqueness is clear in this piece. The content and the flow is very beautiful though the strcuture seems little odd as far as Etherees are concerned, but thats not a prob :) plse dont mind dear.
I really love your poems dear :
Wow. Amazing poem.
Parts of it kind of through me off, but then as I kept reading I kind of understood it. I still don't fully understand it, but it's amazing, still.
Lol. Does that make sense?
Anyway, moving on.
The second etheree was a bit better, I believe. But, that's good because a good ending is always great. :] Of course, a good beginning is too. Which you had, as well.
Ease the fury borne on his mind!
Yet Beauty's rose became weak, and drooped
Within the manger of his brittle heart.
Ah! Good Heavens,
Let the stars blush
[[Damn, Marian...you fluster me with your words.]]
Man as soon as I realized you had a new poem, I had to read it and I'm glad I did. This is amazing, as always.
The the wording seems different from how you normally write, it was still pretty well written, however not your best, in my opinion (and if I may be so bold).
However, I loved the emotion coming from this and the description used. Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful.
WoW this poem has a lot of power and emotion! I love the way you used your words and the flow was just about perfect all the way thru! I love how i could see what you were talkin about while i was reading it! Keep it up!
I wish I could write things like this! I never could get things out like that and i think that is a real talent. :] I liked the poem. It's powerful. But the flow seemed funny to me. Keep workin' on it! 4/5
Wow debbers your words are great where did you get those lines tehehe, yeah your greater than me now cheers.... nice piece I loveit and also the style, one of style which is i didnt even try to write lol, well done hun keep it up
11 years ago
Wow. it was a very powerful piece. it impressed me so much. the imagery was brilliant, i have such a strong picture in my mind and it was just awesome. 5/5