Comments : Rage (Double Etheree)

  • 10 years ago

    by chavii

    Great, this sure is master piece .Superb word choice with flawless flow of words.A enjoyable piece to read.

    Take care
    chavii.

  • 10 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    Awesome penned, Line after line like a melody, i thought it about someone....Maybe....Beautiful ended!

  • 10 years ago

    by Mr M

    Very good piece...

  • 10 years ago

    by Corruption

    Whoa!!!!
    you knocked my chair over
    such a powerful poem
    lol
    great job
    i like the idea for a double etheree

    well great job
    you did a wonderous job on it

  • 10 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Awesome job on the double etheree....very difficult form to master....beautiful woven words from start to finish....I especially like the ending:

    Let the stars blush
    At his face
    With rage,
    ...Rage!

    Well done Debbie......All the Best, Debbie

  • 10 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Now, It is about time you have written another poem, as I have been waiting to review your pieces for awhile now. You know how I love reading this style it is definitly one of my favorites. This showed such great beauty and talent. Definitly a gorgeous piece. Emotions portrayed so strong and in depth.

    Well done hun. Such an enjoyable read. ~mel

  • 10 years ago

    by Cindy

    Debs
    Excellent job! This is my favorite poetry form. You did a stunning job! The imagery is wonderful.
    Take Care Love Cindy

  • 10 years ago

    by Fsams

    Marian this is great! The uniqueness is clear in this piece. The content and the flow is very beautiful though the strcuture seems little odd as far as Etherees are concerned, but thats not a prob :) plse dont mind dear.

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    I really love your poems dear :
    fsams

  • 10 years ago

    by Teria

    Wow. Amazing poem.
    Parts of it kind of through me off, but then as I kept reading I kind of understood it. I still don't fully understand it, but it's amazing, still.
    Lol. Does that make sense?
    Anyway, moving on.
    The second etheree was a bit better, I believe. But, that's good because a good ending is always great. :] Of course, a good beginning is too. Which you had, as well.

    Amazing poem, dear.
    Keep it up. xD

  • 10 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Ease the fury borne on his mind!
    Yet Beauty's rose became weak, and drooped
    Within the manger of his brittle heart.
    [[Beautiful, Marian..]]

    Ah! Good Heavens,
    Let the stars blush
    [[Damn, Marian...you fluster me with your words.]]

    Man as soon as I realized you had a new poem, I had to read it and I'm glad I did. This is amazing, as always.
    The the wording seems different from how you normally write, it was still pretty well written, however not your best, in my opinion (and if I may be so bold).
    However, I loved the emotion coming from this and the description used. Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 10 years ago

    by Riz

    Whoa, this poem reminds me of Greece. Lol. Why? Well, because the words you use were so powerful! And Greece is like powerful too. Yeah >.> ignore me. Anyways, I luve it! Nice choice of words.

  • 10 years ago

    by Mr M

    Still a good piece with vivid imagry and emotion. And still a favorite of mine.

  • 10 years ago

    by Monica AKA Mika

    WoW this poem has a lot of power and emotion! I love the way you used your words and the flow was just about perfect all the way thru! I love how i could see what you were talkin about while i was reading it! Keep it up!

  • 10 years ago

    by ŘÅÇĦ♥

    I wish I could write things like this! I never could get things out like that and i think that is a real talent. :] I liked the poem. It's powerful. But the flow seemed funny to me. Keep workin' on it! 4/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Angela

    Man o man.. what a deep and thoughtful poem!! :) youre a very talented writer, and the poem is pretty flawless
    <3

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Honestly I envy your skill at keeping a flow in a difficult style such as this
    You really did well, as a matter of fact excellent.

  • 10 years ago

    by Christina Yap

    Overall your work is amazing, I LOVE THE ENDIN!!! Rage, very strong word, for a stonger emotion. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Phil

    Wow whats else can I say except a superb piece of
    writing, I'm just in awe of your talent,Wow.this was certainly worth the wait.
    Phil

  • 10 years ago

    by blueknight

    Wow debbers your words are great where did you get those lines tehehe, yeah your greater than me now cheers.... nice piece I loveit and also the style, one of style which is i didnt even try to write lol, well done hun keep it up

    Gene Ross

  • 10 years ago

    by nikki

    Wow. it was a very powerful piece. it impressed me so much. the imagery was brilliant, i have such a strong picture in my mind and it was just awesome. 5/5