Wow!This honestly might be my favorite ..hmmm??*ponders* lol I dont know I just love the point of it...and the last three lines are absolutely magnificent. You of course are by far my fav writer and this proves why. Keep them coming! 6/5

Brit

"Soothing stars breathe their amnesty through impurity;"
^How did you think up of that line? Hell, it's smashing!

"She's worthless, nothing more than a regret to the past."
^ That line alone was sweltering with emotions, very intense. But, besides the emotions, I sensed it's screaming something else...

"You breathe a different story every time you pray,"
^My favorite line! Glad you brought this idea into play. Dead right on my face.

I really, really liked the outcome of this poem. And the refrain as well. There's a tinge of bittersweet mockery within your words, which was rather appealing and delightful to read. Like I've said, I noticed something fishy with its substance. Some sort of a tale behind in every tale, you know? How 'bleak' hope is akin to the smallest light which shines in the dark captivated me completely. Better read in silence than aloud, though. Thanks for sharing! ~Marian xD

Sheena Dear, You are an amazing poet, and your talent seems to grow with each piece I read of yours. This one was great. It was different and that was the refreshing part of this. Unlike me, you change up your rhyme scheme. haha. The line that stuck out the most to me was: "She's worthless, nothing more than a regret to the past." What a line! Amazing! How do you think of these things?! It's like, friggen awesome! You have such talent and that's why you continue to be in my favorites! :)
Ciao<3

"Soothing stars breathe their amnesty through impurity"

That line. Amazing.

"You breathe a different story every time you pray,"

That was my favorite line. There was such beauty and truth behind it because throughout a persons lifetime, they pray many prayers with different meanings.

This was so amazing that I hate you. The flow was perfect, right on key, and you free verse like a beast lol. 5/5

You have done better. this write wasnt very smooth and could have been done better i just didnt get a picture in m head or really feel the poem!

You captured the pain of waiting to be saved flawlessly, i love how every poem you write has a different style, a different technique behind it, its very refreshing and i'd love to see more from you in this style, keep it up