What's Left Is Yours, I Promise.

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Jul 29, 2007


Yet there's no waiting; glass forms the place where we walk,
But, what's left is yours, I promise, though who would bet on that.
Silent echoes beat across your mind; you're lost, I see;
Tripping so delicately, blinking; lost in what?
Take that deep breath the Savior promised that would be breathed for you;
You're bound to need it sometime, but maybe not just yet.
Might've you mistaken them as a kind soul?
They'll tell you, "Now, don't you feel better?"
A sunset touches your eye, but you don't see it; why?
Too much on your mind for such taste to be seen?
Yet there's no waiting; glass forms the place where we walk,
But, what's left is yours, I promise, though who would bet on that.

Silent echoes beat across your mind; you're lost, I see;
Tripping so delicately, blinking; lost in what?
Lost in love? Love was never there, my dear child
It was a lie. It was all a lie.
Take a deep breath that the Savior promised that would be breathed for you;
Let the air tickle your lungs; there, doesn't that taste better?
Let the water trickle onto what lips you've left;
And remember, you must breathe once in awhile.
Those skies muster what you won't take; you shutter away,
There's nothing left you're lost amoungst the broken rays.
Yet there's no waiting; glass forms the place where we walk,
But, what's left is yours, I promise, though who would want to bet on that?

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Rhyme:
a,b,c,d,e,f,g,h,i,j,k,l, m,n,o,p,q,r,s,t,u,v,v,w

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  • 16 years ago

    by AlaSkA

    How i love to read your so teedious(*?)-ly well thought out poems. i have to say i was just reading, and then the line "silent echos beat across your mind" hit me and i was like whoa. really nice line, it gives a sincere depth to it. great write.

    (:
    Tom

  • 16 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    It was all about certain sentences and some of them were so true that made me go wow

    One of them was;

    Lost in love? Love was never there, my dear child
    It was a lie. It was all a lie.

    Keep writing sheena
    Take care,
    Laura

  • 16 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    Wow..this is incredible work -- you give it this complex feel without being too overbearing on the word choice...you don't cram it with metaphors and its pulled off effectively, amazing work

  • 16 years ago

    by Rose not your average

    Silent echoes beat across your mind; you're lost, I see;
    Tripping so delicately, blinking; lost in what?
    that part stood out to me the most! i like how you bring up questions in this poem. this was an amazing write. the flow was great some nice rhymes and very strong use of words

  • 16 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    Whoa. lol That's almost all I can say. This was another amazing poem m'dear. You have a true talent for writing, I'm not even kidding. The way that you can use the English language to describe that is just beyond me... Keep it up!!!
    Ciao<3