Thanks for the feedback. i'd rather have someone give me advice on how to improve instaed of telling me "great job" n stuff like that. i'll take what you said into consideration. oh yea, i have AIM it's Shortieluv313@aol.com. ~schylar~

I like what's coming across in your words, but i couldn't find a beat. try to split it up, with a little more consistancy. :]

Its great...keep it up=]p

I like what you wrote.
It was really nice.
Personaly, I read better when the poem is written in stanza's. So I can easy find the right flow.
But except that, it's a good poem.
Take care

Great job!!! its really relateable it hurts when someone does that but you realize that if they could hurt you like that u deserve better anyway great poem 5/5

This is really really good