Comments : Sex is a boon (Sonnet)

  • 16 years ago

    by CompletelyIncomplete

    Wahoo! Lol I guess this piece is fantastic and thrilling! The funny quality is maintained with great rhymes and rhythm.

    Sex can flood your life with pleasures
    Using your own precious treasures!

    Wow this is an eye-catching line!

    5/5
    CmpImp

  • 16 years ago

    by nikki

    I loved it, it is so honest and true. the way you actually expressed the exact way it means was great. and it is true. everyone cannot do with out sex once they tried it. 5/5 great work. it has made my day, and i'm gonna show my partner. hope that ok.

  • 16 years ago

    by Christina Yap

    Very honest, staight to the point, lol could't get better than that 4 a sonnet lol 5/5 keep it up

  • 16 years ago

    by jason

    Lmao sorry i have to say i found this poem funny o.o it was probably your rhyming in it that amde it sound funny but yeah lol anyways 5/5 it was really good

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    This was a great poem
    just like all of yours are
    but i think it highly qualified as funny

    the rhyming was good till
    it came to last line

    i do agree that the last line wasnt thought out all to well and

    *****Synh, you dont have to be so rude about this work
    i mean seriosuily

    its just a poem and there is no need to be all overworked,
    and you kno not all strippers strip for fun
    they do it to feed there children to
    not just the prostistuetes,
    and the way you said that makes me think you might be one

    just my thoguht

    and i loved this poem

    great job

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by debbylyn

    This is cute and done "tongue in cheek" I take it? Good one for the fun and humor section....I understand why it's on this board though....lol........nice rhyming.....

  • 16 years ago

    by Angela

    Youre such a good writter.. omg i loved this one and its in my favs!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Fsams
    Cute and entertaining :) Too bad you could not have put it in the Humor.
    Good job!
    Take Care Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Narphangu

    Hm, well, it certainly WAS humorous.

    I laughed at some of the inuendos[very clever, I must say]...
    A few of the rhymes were, well, rather forced. And since this is meant to be funny, I suppose that isn't SO MUCH of an issue... But that this poem could be incredibly hilarious if all the words really... well, fit.

    You should also consider revising the last stanza, cause it fails to do your poem justice.

    Just some thoughts.
    I'd give it a 4/5... Just because it needs some improvement.
    All the same, sonnets are hard! I congratulate you for surviving one!
    Yay! Haha...

  • 16 years ago

    by Hope

    Superb! Very Good! I enjoyed it. I love the hilarity of the whole thing.. Keep up the good work

  • 16 years ago

    by TwiztidJuggalette

    LoL..That was pretty funny...Got me to laugh...

    Sex is awesome, sex is funny
    Sex can help you, give you money

    ^That was hailarious...

    Overall 5/5...

  • 16 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    I wonder what you were thinking when you wrote thismlol.
    that was a joke...

    again, you proved that you are such a great poem and the witness is that you can do any style, yet they are all perfect poems, keep it up as always.

    a 5/5 fro me.

  • 16 years ago

    by luv Shelbz luv

    Haha very cute umm im not supposed to post in here but oh well it was funny i liked the first line

  • 16 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    Lol this was pretty good. I enjoyed reading this, I imagine it was fun to write. I think the funniest part is that it's so true. By the way, the flow here was awesome. I do have one suggestion though, "Fill your life with sexy attention", maybe replace sexy with another word since the word sex is used so often and it sounds kind of wierd lol. 5/5

    marcella

  • 16 years ago

    by Serina the Squid

    Lol, I love it. Last two lines didn't flow like the rest, but it's good. Lol, I'm sorry, but I just have to ask...why Fsams? Is that your name?

  • 16 years ago

    by WiNgS Of StEeL

    Hehe it was gr8!!.....sex i sawesome i must agree with you ahah...sex can have so many meanings:D
    u said it very well in this poem:D

    i would appreciate it if you would please read nd comment on some of my new poems aswell:D

    tk care

  • 16 years ago

    by Nicola Barton

    I think there is a word you missed, think its the sixth or eight line.. i think it should read filthy rich, the flow woks better with it... but wicked effort, really enjoyed

  • 16 years ago

    by Alissa

    This was quite funny, you did a great job.
    I don't usually read explicit poetry, but you did a good job.

  • 16 years ago

    by Miu

    Wow yeah! It's so good how this is like a commercial for girls to become h o e s. Not saying a bad thing about life of that kinda of people. It was funny and very simple to read so enjoyable. Original for me.
    Keep up 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Angela

    Omg... i read this one of yours before..
    hahaha its soo funny.. n true lol
    love the rhyming, and the theme haha
    good one
    <3ang