And I Shall Love You, Until I Love No More {Licentia Rhyme}

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Aug 1, 2007


This is like the thoughts of Romeo and Juliet, speaking with Death. If that makes sense. =/. Enjoy.
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Snow, charming to her touch, burns unlike before,
And I shall love you, until I love no more."
Sweet caress by moonlights hand; souls will unite,
Whispers softly, "Love at hand is death at sight."
A soothing breeze glows deathly; "Admit defeat;"
Dash to him; "Without you, I am incomplete."
Master of hearts, dare you breathe a timely death,
"You live too long; mangled veins protest this breath."
Echoes build, tombed cry; "...until I love no more..."
Burned hands touch the snow; souls of love yet ignore.
Snow, charming to her touch, burns unlike before,
"And I shall love you, until I love no more."

Sweet caress by moonlights hand; souls will unite,
Whispers softly, "Love at hand is death at sight,"
Nevermore shall igniting bonds bring to touch;
Dangerous ignorance pass; untimely, oh such!
"Succumb! Render mercy, faithless that you be;
In moment's time, lost admist, but never free."
Woes to woes; love is brutal amongst the cold,
Test precise; taste gracious boundaries nothing holds.
Echoes build; whisper in your ear, "...never free..."
Burned hands cool snow; "You have my heart, and the key."
Snow, charming to her touch, burns unlike before,
"And I shall love you, until I love no more."

A soothing breeze glows deathly; "Admit defeat;"
Dash to him; "Without you, I am incomplete."
Souls mend their hearts; they've not forgotten the dark,
Rendered black, hearts sing pity upon the mark.
"We have lived not in vain, but for love and word,"
Crashing templates for the latter that occurred.
Grasp failing hands that seem lost in time, a shame;
"This is death and love, don't you see! Not a game!"
Echoes build; "Grim arrives soon, my dears, be still,"
"We will not succumb!" Does gasp a greater chill.
Snow, charming to her touch, burns unlike before,
"And I shall love you, until I love no more."

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The Licentia Rhyme Form, a poetic form created by Laura Lamarca, consists of at least 3
12-line stanzas with 11 syllables per line. Of course, the poem can be elongated adding on
to the following rhyme scheme: aabbccddeeAA, BBffgghhiiAA, CCjjkkllmmAA

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  • 10 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    You're really succesful at that poetry forms..I can see you like changes and you know how to do a change in a good way
    Beatifully penned,
    Laura

  • 10 years ago

    by Prophecies In Kodak

    I may not be speaking with you, But I will comment your poetry.
    This was my favorite of yours.
    you stopped worying about form and just let it flow. it was excellent. and I am indeed, impressed.

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    An incredible write...i usually try to mark an area of improvement but its hard to do that when its perfect...i love the incorporation of the quotes and dialogue, it creates a very real and vivid image of the story at hand--keep up the good work!

  • 10 years ago

    by Twisted Heart

    Sheena,

    I first read this in a contest and was taken aback by the gravity of emotions being pulled through each line. It was the title, first, that captured my attention, then it was the words, and last the structure. It was, indeed, a very beautiful write.

    It was a tender write, despite the sadness of the message. A wonderful job you did on this.

    Always,
    Jeannie

  • 10 years ago

    by Debbie

    Good Heavens, Sheena, how sweet Disgrace is!

    But what I had read in those few moments made me catch my breath in amazement. The bittersweet sorrow elicited by the characters was spine-tingling. The tone of voice was severely emotive and emotions raw and well articulated. It's quite astonishing to note how well you used the forces of nature as a metaphor of Death. (If I got the wrong idea, you better keep quiet...Shh!)

    Gosh, it's too stupendous for words. You had hoped that I'll like it--are you kidding?! I love it. It's an honor to read this masterpiece of yours. Keep it up! All the best and take care.

    +Favorites x]

    5/5 ~Marian.