Just maybe....

by BECCA lessTHANthree   Aug 2, 2007


Its freezing out here and your breath is escaping
I see it so clear, but I'm breathing no trace
Maybe its just because im empty
Or maybe, just maybe, im not really here

Cause im screaming so loud and you wont even look
And when you do you just stare right through me
Maybe its because its easier that way...
Or maybe you just can be bothered

I know that things ended, too painful and too soon
And we're both tangled in words unspoken
Maybe I should've chased you when you ran from the scene
Or maybe, you like that I didn't

But darling, im sorry, I never meant to hurt you
I never would've started this if I know how we'd turn out.
Maybe I just thought that my ways would change...
Or maybe at the time I didnt care.

But I care now, I promise and even though it's too late,
If you could, just please, one more glance?
Maybe if you look you'll see I'm dying too...
Or maybe, just maybe...you've already healed.

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  • 16 years ago

    by LovexMe

    I like the poem, but

    But darling, I'm sorry, I never meant to hurt you ,
    Even though that I knew I probably would,
    Maybe I just thought my ways would change..
    Or maybe at the time I didn't care.

    just doesnt... fit.
    i dont know...
    but its a very good poem. 4/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by e LIZ a beth

    I really like the poem.. im not too fond of "But darling, I'm sorry, I never meant to hurt you ,
    Even though that I knew I probably would,
    Maybe I just thought my ways would change..
    Or maybe at the time I didn't care."

    it doesnt really fit i cant figure out how or why but it doesnt..

    but all in all it turned out really good :D

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    *are

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    Nice write. The dismal sadness drawn out by the characters is dismaying. Certain lines needs tightening-up to augment the flow, whereas the pitch is slightly plaintive and emotions raw and well put into words. The images you portrayed seems unpleasantly cold akin to the situation in progress. Nicely done. ~Marian

  • 16 years ago

    by Lonely Little Dreamer

    The beginning was definitely my favorite part of the poem. You were able to express your feelings very well. It was well done and the flow was pretty good. Keep up the good work.

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