Hide and Seek

by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden   Aug 5, 2007


In the time it takes to count to three
You are already gone and hidden from me
You hide behind a thin black quilt
Sewn from the sins that give you guilt
Your smile is drawn on and so are your eyes
They are both made of an ink made up of lies
Your clothing is gone and the stitches are shown
You hide behind your appearance and speak monotone
You are a puppet controlled by your own mind
You write lies on your paper so simple and lined
You write about love and you write about life
When I see deep down you write about the knife
You put on a mask and act like a clown
You try to act happy when really you're down
You're nothing but fake you're sad and afraid
You could have said something and I would have stayed
Now you're living in blackness away from the light
And I've stopped trying to find you because you're out of my sight

VOTES and comments are appreciated so please don't hesitate.
My friend and I are doing a project on creating the character described in the poem by using Photoshop and other picture programs. If you'd like to see our progress, or would like to give it a shot yourself, let me know.

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  • 9 years ago

    by Yeka

    Awww dude love this poem truly wonderful (^_^) 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Roses and lilys

    I like it. It has a nice flow to it and i loved the words that you used. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by GoodMEMORIES

    This poem was really deep. i think that it was pretty good. i really enjoyed it.

  • 10 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    You hide behind a thin black quilt
    Sewn from the sins that give you guilt
    [[I like the rhyme usage here; it's very unquie and flowed well.]]

    Sewn from the sins that give you guilt
    [[And I love this line.]]

    Your smile is drawn on and so are your eyes
    They are both made of an ink made up of lies
    [[I love this metaphor... really a pretty picture you drew for me here.]]

    You hide behind your appearance and speak monotone
    [[I really like this line, but it was a little too long for the flow to stay perfect. Perhaps take out and?]]

    When I see deep down you write about the knife
    [[ACK! The cliche "knife" and "life" rhyme! No! Bad!]]

    You write lies on your paper so simple and lined
    [[I freaking ADORE this line.
    But anyways, I think this line is where the poem should end. From the beginning to this line the poem was amazing, then it seriously started going down hill from there. Cut the lines after this off, and I'll give you a five. Otherwise, it's a four.]]

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex -No Rate...Yet-

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I love this...
    Beautifully written and every word is filled with such elegance.
    Flow and content are perfect throughout the piece, and so many people will be able to relate to this...beautiful work.