Comments : My Final Good-Bye (Collab)

  • 16 years ago

    by Miranda

    Great poem.So full of emotion.It really kept my attention while reading it.Yet another 5/5.
    Miranda

  • 16 years ago

    by Lindsay

    Very emotional poem :) I enjoyed it very much. Excellent poem over all! 5/5!

    -Lins.

  • 16 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    The poem was a bit long but it kept me interested at all times, it's amazing how the words string along when your writing with another. Excellent flow and great imagery by both of you - 5/5 GG23

  • 16 years ago

    by Serina the Squid

    Long, the flow isn't great, but it's not bad. An over all good poem. 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Well to be honest.. I have never collab with anyone yet.. So I really respect the works of the people who can do collabs. Good job!

    Anyway I think it was a marvellous piece, the only thing I don't like about this poem is the constant use of I's =)

    Nonetheless, a fantastic poem.

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Very beautiful collab, the words really strung well to make it cohesive and coherent with the content and the caption. The flow is great and the imagery is superb. But there are little confusions of the use of then/than and some lines need punctuation( eg. line12)

    Nevertheless its 5/5 for sure :)
    Fsams

  • 16 years ago

    by Numb6661

    Very good poem, it really brought alot of emotion out of me when i read it........
    good job
    With Love Jake.

  • 16 years ago

    by tears i cry

    It was a good poem and i can relate but the problem is the flow you see when you make the first 2 lines rhyme and the bottom 2 lines rhyme it makes it sound forced like its not truely what you believe overall though good work 4/5 for trying

  • 16 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    Wow it's pretty sad and sorrowful..you two did a good work with words and rhyme..But I could suggest something if you let me

    I feel-Feeling in 2nd stanza

    But it's just an idea
    Keep it up,
    Laura

  • 16 years ago

    by Lets Keep it A Surprise

    An all too well message, spoken through great pens. I loved the wording, but it may have been my reading but some parts the flow just didn't quite make it. All in all a great poem still, and I enjoyed reading it :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Alissa

    This was quite a cute poem, yet...the flow was a bit off and the rhymes were a bit unoriginal. But the meaning of this made it really good. If the rhymes were more unique, this poem would turn from cute to amazing. You did a good job in all though, great job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Few lines aren't good but rest of this poem is excellent.
    And is there a point to ask
    Can we even unmask
    All the things we never said
    Why must these tears shed
    ^This is my favorite stanza. You described emotions superbly. I don't like rhyming but topic is great. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Miu

    Good poem! Im not into looong poems. but it was very emotional and rhymed. Meaning was great.
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Kayla

    I'm out of words. Nothing I can say will show you how much I loved this poem. If you don't know already, I am a bigger fan of the sadder, darker poems.. Poems about love and lost love, broken relationships, things like that. This poem really takes the cake, I have to say it is one of your best yet, Elaine. You and Marlanna did an excellent job on this.. hehe, now I am curious to see how she writes her poems since she helped you out on this.

    I would tell you much more, but I am running out of time.. My mom is about to wake up and I need to hurry up and get off the pc.

    5/5 <3

  • 16 years ago

    by White Chocolate Dynamite

    I dont care how long a poem is just as it gets the point out. Very good, loved this one. 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Long, yet kept me captured and kept me focused. a very good write, you both did an amzing job.
    keep it up
    love Tara-Kay
    x

  • 16 years ago

    by Curry

    Oh wow all i can say is great poem. it had a really good flow and it was very enjoying to read. i loved it. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Boy

    Awwww. such a sad poem. and a tear came from my eyes. i loved your both works here. great great work you work deserve 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Aaron Deevers

    This really touched me in a way I can't explain. It brought back some nice memories.