Comments : Where Forever Ends.

  • 10 years ago

    by limp

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  • 10 years ago

    by limp

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  • 10 years ago

    by Prophecies In Kodak

    Did you notice...
    we both capitalize at random moments in our poetry?

  • 10 years ago

    by Espoirfailed

    This loss could sink the ocean but I'm sure,
    we're wearing thin and caving in,

    woweeee.....

    another great read

  • 10 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    "we're wearing thin and caving in"

    i love that line for some reason, it just flow(ed?) perfectly and gave it this umph..if that makes any sense---i love the style that you used, its very raw and not so generic

  • 10 years ago

    by Prophecies In Kodak

    Hi laura!
    iloveyou

  • 10 years ago

    by Lisa

    Great work,was very powerful
    keep it up

  • 9 years ago

    by kati

    I love this poem!!!!

  • 9 years ago

    by pookiengurgi

    Wow that's so sad & sweet..and the title is very catchy.Good work!:)

  • 9 years ago

    by Ixora

    0_0 this ones awesome...but laura honey what happened u never write anymore we miss u : (

  • 9 years ago

    by Viola

    This reminds me of Ian's poetry somehow. But anyways, I think it's beautifully writen once again. You have a way with words that makes each poem so meaningful. And surely those metaphors add such vivid colours to it. Each line in itself is so powerful and holds such deep emotion. I can really feel this one. It does something to my heart.

    "These words weren't written for rhythm;
    they're just as bad as they sound,
    because I've never felt distance like dysfunction.
    the repetition isn't easy and I'm beginning to find,
    that it's more a curse that i can read your mind."
    ^That beginning drew me in and it kept my attention all the way to the end. Another amazing poem. Keep it up! =]
    --Viola