Comments : A Lifeless Portrait (Pantoum)

  • 16 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    As I'm returning comments I realize this is the third poem with the word "shrouded". I just felt like sharing that lol.

    Well, your an amazing poet. I believe you could rewrite the washing directions on the tag of my shirt into a beautfiful work of art. Your word choice here, as usual, amazes me. A pantoum at it's best I believe. It is always a pleasure to read. 5/5

    marcella

  • 16 years ago

    by JaMeS

    I think you did well to right this with some flow because of the complex well i think complicated style lol but overall a good piece :)

  • Nice i love how i can vison it =]

  • Nice i love how i can vison it =]

  • 16 years ago

    by luv Shelbz luv

    Whoa i love this soooooooo much. it is an extraordinary piece. simply lovely. thank u.

  • 16 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    Absolutely beautiful emotions penned you portrait here, well choice the words as the river flow well. Awesome penned! "You will adjust yourself to what is, and not try to adjust everything to your own desires, you will take your "luck" as it comes, and fit yourself to it."

    Keep them coming, have a blessed day, take care.

  • 16 years ago

    by njabulo b

    Your poem is perfect.

  • 16 years ago

    by Letty

    This poem was so beautifully written that it brought tears to my eye's as I read it. There are only a few poets on this site that can actually do that to me and you just became one of them. This poem is picture perfect. i am definitely adding it to my favorite poem list. I really loved it. Keep writing, you are a very talented writer. I look forward to reading more of your work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Letty

    Also welcome to my favorite poets list..That is a hard list to get on. lol

  • 16 years ago

    by shade127

    Wonderfully written. this poem reveals your true talents.

  • 16 years ago

    by Shirani Graham

    Very much stirring, let them flourish.. 5/5
    Check for my new poem'favorite authors' - thanks

    Nazeer

  • 16 years ago

    by chavii

    A reall marvel you have penned debbie, such enchanting piece to read, Beautiful imagery with best choosen vocab.
    Keep up the good work :)

    Take care
    chavii.

  • 16 years ago

    by xPerfect Chaosx

    This is a spectaular poem my sexy secret lover. In such a constricting style. It's amazing. The depth and flow are incredible love. Wonderful write ^^

    Much Love,
    Your Super Secret Sexy Lover ^_~

  • 16 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    An astounding work of art, beautifully worded.
    When I read a Poem, I try to understand the emotion of the writer, Seeing a admired hero of olden times, not a Lover. Someone great, a leader perhaps, Napolean. Awesome job, just awesome!
    Peace and Blessings

  • 16 years ago

    by Phil

    A beautiful piece, I loved it 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Elizabeth Ann

    I enjoyed this form of poetry very much. Though I am guilty of neglecting from any form whatsoever, I can certainly appreciate my wonton tastes of it, ignorant though I may be.

    The subject of a man in a portrait was romantic; I think "romantic" describes the mystiscm of a "look" without words. Communication without words is so underappreciated, I find; although it's use is used deliciously in romance novels, which I attest, are warming indeed so indulged;)

    You language mimed the subject quite appropriately, as it seemed ancient and alluring. I swore I could see a girl standing before a painting with her head turned, in my mind’s eye.