Well it was a beautiful free verse poem, The title really suits in the poem, good job. I also like the opening line of the poem, It really grab my attention.

I have one suggestion though..
(I gaze the rain falling) when I see just like this hallucination
= Gazing at the falling rain..

^^ Just a suggestion okay.

Nonetheless it was a great poem.
5/5

Wow, excellent piece.

"A little tear drop falls down to the paper
Ruins the handwriting and almost all my mind"
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Those are my favourite lines. They are so perfect and wonderful.

From start to finish you held my attention && I love this poem. Amazing!

Keep it up && Take care!

-Shannon <3

Lovely poem had my attenshion from the begining you have a unique style that makes this poem very special there are a few lines in which the word order is a little mixed except for this very nice poem.

Realy lovely poem,but i think you have talent to do better,your words are mysterious like your feelings and you,so its not easy for everyone to find out what are you talking about,so it makes you think about your poems and i like it,go on

Laura this piece is not bad. The metaphorical content is very creative and beautiful. I think if you add some rhyming stanzas it would be very nice. By the way papers has is not correct it should be have. :) tc still I will give you 5.5 coz you have full potential.

tc
Fsams

How endearing. I adore the figurative language you utilized on this piece. It certainly upholds the impact of the emotions and the whole poem itself, too. The poem is absolutely exquisite in nature, whereas its technical aspects need modification. I'll admit that I reread it several times in order to get the poem's gist. It seems to me that the flow is uneven on certain areas. Perhaps tightening-up the lines--in my humblest opinion--will augment the flow? Nevertheless, I, too, believe that this poem is of great promise. It has the potential to shine even more brighter in the future when it is enhanced.
Thanks for sharing.

I would say this is a very beautiful piece of work. You express deep thoughts, you stayed on point. It's fabulous! 5/5

Beautiful job. I congradulate you on a well-written love poem that isn't just "I love you and you love me" sort of thing. Very descriptive.

This was beautifully penned and there are lines that really touched my heart, and caught my eye on (my interest). But the problem here is the flow, i don't where you up to and it was a little off.

If this isn't one of your better writes I would love to read your best, because this poem was outstanding. Fantastic job overall 5/5 for sure GG23

This poem is beautiful and there is no other way to describe it i wish i could write poems like this but there is no way ill ever be this good 5/5 for amazing talent in writing this poem

I like it very much. It is excellently written and holds so many emotions. I like the title , it's very captivating. Whole poem has great choice of words, and you created very vivid imagery through it. The third stanza is my favorite.
5/5 from me; keep up!

First two stanzas to me were a little iffy the rest was beatiful 5/5 very nice

I think the rhymes in this poem were forced a bit. Also, there were a few instances where I think you made up words to fit a rhyme scheme. The grammar was off in places. Overall, I think this poem needs to be reworked quite a bit, nice start, but now comes the time for revision.

Laura
What a sad piece you have penned.
Good job!
Take care Cindy

I do believe "occurness" is not a word. You could hyphenate it though. [occur-ness] I think I would replace it with a completely new word though. It sounds sort of funny. Anyway, the imagery here is wonderful. Great depth and creativity.

marcella