Greatly written and just a beautiful poem overall.

bravo!

Very erotic. I could visualize this as if I were reading an erotic magazine. Tasteful but sexy. Great job.

This is a great example of a clean yet dirty erotic poem. Its nice to see other poets that write with this style but manage to keep away from slang words when writing.

I like that the poem started off innocently with you in the shower, but quickly moves into the theme of the poem.

In the first stanza, I loved the term HYPER AWARE.

In stanza six, I love the adjectives, but thought that it could some use contrast. Maybe you could contrast the HEATED SKIN with FLOWING COLD WATER. I think it would help add to the imagery some.

In the next stanza, I like the "Wanting to feel you from within" line. Its almost too suggestive but it doesnt cross the line.

Throughout the poem, I like that you used words that added to the imagery. The poem read like a poem, but seemed to tell a story more like a book. I thought that the poem could use a little more detail in the scenes, but that would make the poem really long, so I can see why you didnt go that route.

I loved the ending. It seemed to end kind of quickly, but it reminded me of how a movie ends in the middle of a scene. It seemed to leave room for a sequel maybe . .

Overall, this was a really good poem.