Comments : Cliche Teen

  • 10 years ago

    by Adelle

    This is a very powerful poem with a lot of emotion I really like your style and I am intending on reading more of your work. I’m not sure what to write because this poem has left me speechless it really is very powerful.

  • 10 years ago

    by Fsams

    No offence against you but only positive points :). Though the poem is really long, you kept it cohesive and the way words strung makes it really coherent to the content and the caption. Well deserved 5/5 :)

    Tc
    Fsams

  • 10 years ago

    by TracyM

    You know, you really have a way with words, and I can relate to the best part of this poem, especially the self harm and alcohol abuse. The emotion in strong, and whats more, there is a message amongst your words. Loved it.

    xx

  • 10 years ago

    by the come back

    Nice poem...rhyming everything is great....5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    It's pretty good. Some of the rhyming was off in some parts an I found a punctuation mistake but it was pretty good. I love the last line. :) I'm just happy that I found myself before I did any of this. I don't even like the taste of alchohol so I won't even be drinking when it's legal. I just don't like it. I'll give it a four. I like the story line and the title was unique.

  • 10 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Excellent poem. One of the best I've ever read on this site. I must admit when I first looked at the poem I found the length a little daunting but I'm glad I read it. This poem is filled with so much deep emotions and is very true. I can't relate to all of it but I can relate to some and I think you described what some teens go through very well. I think its amazing how you kept the flow so flawless all the way through. You have so much talent. I also loved how in the last two stanzaz you said you went through the things too.
    5/5

    Keep it up && Take Care!
    -Shannon <3

  • 10 years ago

    by Sweet Fragility

    This is an amazing poem. I have never read anything like it (in a good way, of course.) I love the rhyming and the flow was good too. And of course its great that theres a message behind it. 5/5
    Lie about inner feelings, pretend all is well
    Don't let anyone know you're headed to hell
    LOVE these lines ^^^^^^^

  • 10 years ago

    by shade127

    I thought this poem was FANTASTIC! Flowed very well and very descriptive. I'm sure these words will help someone else who is goign through similiar situations.

    One of the best I've read 5+

  • 10 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    I thought this was definitly a powerful poem. I loved how you took your situation and turned it into a flawless peice, that can help other's understand and grasp what you went through.
    Amazing.
    I really enjoyed reading this.
    5/5 Elaine.

  • 10 years ago

    by Spidergirl Jess

    Wow thats so sad im glad you got over it. i loved it though and it was pure genius :]
    5.5

    <3 spidergirl

  • 10 years ago

    by chelsea

    Wow a beautiful poem, i was laughing throughout.good keep it up 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by littlemissxsunshine

    This is my favorite
    i don't understand why people do all this stuff
    it's not worth it
    no offence
    someday i hope they relise
    it is awsome i love it though
    (=

  • 10 years ago

    by babblingxbrooke

    This poem had to be one of the BEST poems I have ever read on this site...it just oozed with so much powerful emotion and spoke to every teen in this world...it was scary in the fact that people do really do this but hopefully those people take the time to read this wonderful poem and it will also change their life around...AMAZING!

    Brooke<3

  • 10 years ago

    by Nix

    To be honest I don't like this poem too much. Topic is good and message too but I personally don't like some parts because I love metaphors in the poems and I hate when someone use same words many times in one piece. Sorry, this is just my opinion, but I don't like it.

  • 10 years ago

    by melissa

    Love this poem it portrays a majority of teens now a days including myself 5/5 outstanding

  • 10 years ago

    by MeeyCie

    I really really liked this poem. it was powerfull and meanfull. I wish I could write like that :) Great going

  • 10 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Wow. O_o
    I'm envious. (:
    That was by far one of the best poems that I have ever read on this site. Everything about it was perfect. The flow was flawless, the emotions were strong, & it was just perfect. :P Overall: 5.5 Fabulous job.

    --- Stephanie Lynn .+.

    && Thx for the comment on my poem, it means a lot to me. (: Oh, by the way... this poem has earned a spot on my favorites. ;]

  • This poem literally brought tears to my eyes because I was also trapped at point one time too.I've done two of those things.I overcame one but the other is still nagging at me. Hopefully one day I will overcome them all.Sometimes I'm scared to ask for help because I don't want to feel like I am a burden to someone else.I don't want to weigh anybody else down with my pitiful little problems.This poem is amazing.It is going to be the fist poem to go on my favorites list.I thank you for writting this poem.I give you a 5/5 for sure!!Keep up the amazing writting.

    -*-Amber-*-

  • 10 years ago

    by Devon

    Great ideas! I love it!

  • 10 years ago

    by GretaInsideOut

    This poem reminds me of me. Well done.