I really like this but I’m holding on for the next installment It would be grate if you could make it longer.

Wow really good. you got all that in 4 little lines. i applaud you :D

good work! 5/5

Ok, Honestly it takes alot to actually impress me and you id just that. I'm stunned by this piece. 4 lines and you expressed so much within it. I wouldn't make it longer or add anything else to it, to me it was really great. I usually find things that I don't like it poems but I can't find anything with this. Well done on writing a beautiful short piece. ~mel

Short but right the point haha..i love it...i love how you threw the concept of eden there, very great work 5/5!

Its amazing knowing this short poem holds that much meaning, you are truly talented dear and a 5/5 from me as you truly deserve it.

It's really short.. but good.. I liked it and you got your point across.. I liked it.. mostly anythig that is written about heaven i like.

Nice n simple :)

Short but sweet 4/5

Short poem but reeally good...short poems dont really impress or interest me but this one did..good job.

Very cute, I liked the imagination in this. It was shorter than I would of expected and liked, yet it was surprising. Great job!

Great poem. Extreeeeemely short :P. But I think you did a great job with it. You should make it longer the next time you're bored hehe. (I'm in a good mood so I'm kind of gitty, sorry).
Anyway, this is great so far but yea, you should really make it longer. I was sitting there wondering where the rest was. :p. 5/5

-Shannon <3

Short and sweet. It was really quite beautiful. In four lines, you said a lot. I think I like it the way it is. 5/5

marcella

Short yet delicatley written, four lines who knew they could speak so many volumes, the word choice and vocab were simply amazing, the emotion was powerfully strong, and the flow magnificant

Too short but full of emotion ^_^ 5/5

I love it, it is short but very emotional and descriptive. You created beautiful imagery in it.
Well done, 5/5

Hmm...It was alright, I loved the discription it really caught my eye, but it didn't quite flow to me. It was still a pretty good pen, but I must say I believe you could do better :)

Very nice, even though it was a bit short.

Hehe ur boredom was made a great simple poem... keep on writing 5/5

The time when you are bored might be the time you write your best work.
This is short but sweet. It is a really nice poem. 5/5

Kalee

It was short and very simple but the message was strongly there. it was beautifully written, nicely done