Free verse works well for you Todd, and you are able to get your feelings across very nicely and with good imagery.

What you could work on is capitalizing all your I's and leaving one space after interpunction, not forget to start a new line with a capital. Those are all small points, but when you get it right, your work will look more polished.

Best of luck and God bless,

5/5 Ingrid

Looks like you think and write.. then think and feel.. and think and feel.. then think feel and write.. and then words that seem right do not match emotions and then those emotions fail to reflect what you meant..
kkinda like what i just wrote..
your poem is filled with emotions beyond words...
remember that sometimes less words can express more.. but more than less.. and less than more :P

keep writing

I really loved this. but the parts when you don't start a sentence with a capital letter or you squish the words and add unnecessary commas really bothered me. but other than that, i really did love the feeling throughout this. it fits with my feelings at the moment. great job and thanks for recommending this to me. :)

In your own way, you explain the complexity of love and put it in such a way that it's understandable and everyone can relate to it. It's powerful, really.

5/5
so good. and it fits how i feel right now. but please don't capitalize the word/s it bothers me. and the position of the punctuation marks.
all in all its so nice...

A very good poem, I liked it very much. It had a good flow without too much repetative rhythm. Great emotion, not too sentimental, not too angry, just honest. Very good.

I agree with 'DreamingOutLoud' - about the writing and feeling thing and the less is more thing. LOL
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NOW MY TURN:

I like it, but it does need a little bit of revision. Mainly just shorten it (OMG DID I JUST WRITE THAT?!) because you seem to repeat yourself (and not in an effective way).

Also, the second last stanza - you lost your format completely here. That whole stanza needs to be re-written to conform with the rest of the poem.

Again, need to capitalise your 'i' and 'i'm' throughout the piece.

Corrections:
7th stanza;
'struck in spot' I think it should be 'struck in the spot'

8th stanza;
'friendship that ever quite..' - should be 'friendship that NEVER quite...'

9th stanza;
'voice in my, mind' -- the comma should be AFTER mind not before.

THE ENDING...
I'm not sure about the ending. For some reason I'm completely torn. I think I like the fact that you have written it to be continuous, but then again the line just doesn't have much impact as endings usually do. Need to work on this for future writes.

OVERALL;
Okay, looking above, I have been quite critical. SORRY if I was too harsh, I don't intend to be, I just want to help you improve your writing. (:
I really do like the concept of the piece (not the fact that it seems to torment you, but the idea that you are presenting readers).

Regarding your folder choice again.
I don't think it belongs in love poems so much. I don't know. To me this was kind of sad, I don't know if that was how you intended but that's how it came across to me. Have a think about it. Your choice.

Keep writing. 5/5

I really like this!
Great work Todd :)

deeplydesturbed xx