One Wish

by amber   Aug 16, 2007


If I could have one wish come true
I would wish that I'd have you.

Is there a shooting star to wish upon?
Because you have to be the one.

Is it too much to ask for?
I've never felt this way before.

When I close my eyes there you are,
flying across like a shooting star.

Then you ran into her arms
and poison me with your charms.

She got my dream, my one dream.
I'm nothing without you it seems.

I need to stop wishing for you,
my one wish that won't come true.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Rhymes are typical. You have many mistakes. This poem isn't original and atmosphere could be stronger. You have too many repetitions and that destroys the flow.

  • 16 years ago

    by Adelle

    A sweet poem very nice good layout emotion could be a little stronger.

  • 16 years ago

    by Raven

    Ignore Rebeccas comment -_-
    Your Poem was great hon.
    Loved it.
    I really loved the meaning of it :)
    5/5

    ~Mz.Raven

  • 16 years ago

    by Rose not your average

    This is a cute poem! i like when people bring up questions in the poems!
    but the ending is sad!

  • 16 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    This was very good, it flowed well, and held emotion and a meaning deep within. you carried off the style well and kept the flow going.
    i loved it
    love Tara-Kay
    x

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