Dear Lord, I pray to thee
Grant wisdom to those
out on our streets
allow them knowledge
to save many lives
show them hope
not one soul shall die

first of all i loves this stanza alot. it realy awesome. first stanza creat intrest to read all other poem carefully. and again this is an art. that how you made reader attention towards your poem. excellent piece of work.
there ar many talented writers inthis website. youare one of them
and realy deserve 5/5
take care

"in our hearts they keep" = I suggest, for the sake of sense, you make it "In our hearts they'll be" =]

Also, I don't like the fact that this doesn't make use of any punctuation, but I can live with that =] After all, I never used punctuation until recently.

Meaningful and useful poem, and unique in many ways. The syllabication is kind of sketchy, but I could tell that towards the end, you stopped worrying about the syllabication, and focused towards getting your point across.

I do believe, though, you could have, with a little more information, delved deeper into the dangerous and heart-wrenching world of the medic's, and made the reader understand more and appreciate more, more than you already placed that into the reader's mind.

I did enjoy it, and it was a wonderful piece of art.

Don't forget capitalization and punctuation. =]

Great job, m'dear =]

5/5
~Stephen White

Wonderfully written, and very unique. The message was strong and clear and filled with emotional and it was such a treat to read. I would say only this, sacraficing should be spelled sacrificing. nothing else really, 5 from me

This poem is beautiful! I love the message and the feeling. You are amazing! This is so touching. Im at a loss for words.

-Yvonne

Wow, That was amazing, It held so much meaning. I loved the way you put it into a prayer, It was beautifully penned. And a amazing piece to read...Keep it up...

5/5

Penned Perfectly!

Truly it was amazing, the message was so heartfelt, the flow was flawlesss, and just overall a very life teaching- well written- meaningful peice of poetry- made from your talent:)

Amazing!
5/5
Elly

PERFECT! Just beautiful. I love the way you arent't self centered with your poetry. This was truly an amazing, thoughtful, and touching work of literature. 5/5 keep it up

A poem written on something most of us-at least I- don't really think about until a relative or friend has been threatened with death. ONce again you really show the emotions perfectly in another greeat poem.
5/5

I loved it! ANOTHER 5/5! My uncle used to be a paramedic! So I know the thought. ^^ Very well done m'dear!

luv luv luv
Lizzi

Wow, this is really really well written, it gave me goosebumps when i read it. 5/5, really good job man.

Wow, beautiful tribute to medics! Awesome, good job! 5/5

Wow... this poem is crazy good. its a prayer.. i love that you decided to write a poem like this i think that you have a amazing self of wisdom in order to do such a marvelous piece like this one...

you are an anazing writer

keep it up

5/5

Amazed by how many coments you have here, wow. But i can see why, this was sad, yet it was well written and held so much meaning.
The flow was good too.
Love,
Essie

Claps* Beautiful. It really reminded me of one of those poems you read over Christmas break. It just really reminds me of something on an ornament or a gift to someone whom (or is it who, or that?) is a medic. I enjoyed it very much and the content was excellent. You took a job that not many talk about and made it poetic. 5.

This poem is AMAZING! i absolutly love it...im putting it as one of my fav's. you are a very talented writer!!!

A beautiful creed and dedication to those who really do deserve it. I love the emotion behind your words, and the fact that you have used a poem inside a pray.

I absolutly love the concept of

"no prejudice or hate"

I truely believe that and find it's one of the most important things to being a good medic.

excellent write.
xoxo

The poem flows so well that I did not know when it ended. Its so honest and heartfelt. It touches the readers heart and I am proud of you for this wonderful piece. God bless you

tc
Fsams

I thought it was a good poem, your wording was good, but i thought the poem didnt have any real meaning to it, like its just a poem and it doesnt affect me, well all together i give it a 4/5

This is such a moving poem that should touch the heart, soul, and mind of the heroes that many times are just taken for granted. I am simply speechless at the inspiration of this well written poem with a most worthy theme.

I enjoyed the sentiment and grace of the poem. Medics definitely deserve more honour, and this is an effective and emotive work of praise.

As far as the flow of the poem is concerned, the formal usage of 'thee' and the occasional rhymes set up an expectation of a more regular rhyme scheme. Consequently I would suggest either eliminating the spot rhymes, or working the piece to include a more regular rhyme scheme.

However, this is a warmly emotive poem that sits quite nicely in the heart and mind as it is.