Comments : Can I?

  • 16 years ago

    by chelsea

    This is really sad.

  • 16 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    Wow I liked the sadness and sorrow all along the masterpiece
    There are alot of questions unanswered that all of us ask

    My fave lines are;

    Can I play this game of life?
    What to do? Die or survive?
    Can I take This pain?
    I'm about to go insane.

    Keep writing,
    Laura

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    What a awesome piece you have penned. Very heartwrenching.

    Can I hold on for long?
    Can I be more strong?
    No hope, No choice.
    Can you hear my voice?

    These lines really touched my heart. Isn't that all we all need a hand to help us stand and someone to hear us.
    Excellent job on this poem.
    Take Care Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Very effective and emotional, with very good choice of words. I like the rhyme scheme in this one, you did great job with it. Whole poem is very powerful, and it holds a lot of sadness.

  • 16 years ago

    by Gem

    "Here I am once again.
    Broken and confused.
    Misused and abused."

    Such a heartbreaking ending.. but as always, you've penned an amazing piece
    5/5
    *Gem*