Very interesting song it is original and emotions are greatly expressed. Ending is very effective. I tried to sing it, it is excellent, I sing very bad but you created melody with words which is outstanding.
Well done! 5/5

Explicit! Wonderful! You have outdone yourself. This is great. Such an emotional release too.

--Sher

Great I think, especially for a song, I would change had to has in the refrain, other than that the flow was flawless. The feeling was great too. good job 5

This poem is lovely the wording is perfect and for this I give it 5/5 unfortunatly it isen't a poem

Wow that was beautiful i could imagine the song 5/5

It was nicely penned, it was emotional. and you expressed it well. i absolutely loved this. great work. 5/5 from me. ^_^

Very emotional and good words it suits very well..have band by the way?

Amazing, beautiful and powerful lyrics. This was an enjoyable read =]

Excellent song! Very true almost everyone could relate to this. The emotion was there. Now all it needs is a beat lol. Oh and on the Refrain I would change 'change' to changed. Excellent lyrics!

I loved this song, It was so simple yet unique and held originality. The emotion you portrayed into this was really capturing. You went into great depths with pouring your heart into a beautiful piece. I'm sure many people could sing along with this so it's quite an enjoyable song. Overall this was sweetly written giving me a smile on my face.

I swallowed my pride for you

My favorite line. ^^

Well done with this. ~Mel

Great poem. I loved the emotion in it. I think a lot of people can relate to this; I sure can.
I also really loved how you ended it. I always like when songs do that. I think the only way this song could be better is if you were singing it ^_^

Great Job. 5/5

-Shannon <3

Yo bro this song rocks!

That rocks, its a little sad but hey, it works. I am not sure how to crtique lyrics lol
the flow seemed good, the emtion was strong, the word was absoulty amazing, I would mind hearing this to music. all in all you did a great job 5/5

Nagawa koh na poh....galing mu poh...magaling karin cguroh kumanta.....^_^ 5/5

This is a great song. i think that with the right type of music it would sound wonderful. The flow of the words were amazing, and the emotion you have put in it is wonderful. 5/5

Kalee

God,,, I loved it, it was very meaningful =] keep the work up i am sure i will read more of your work