Comments : You're The One I Want To Love [Triolet]

  • 16 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    This is very good. I also admire structured poetry as I find that it is the hardest.

    The only thing I would change is the very last line.

    I would write it:

    No one else could even come close comparing to you

    By removing the first to in that sentence you allow it to flow better.

    That is just my thought babe. Overall, this is well written.

    --Sher

  • 16 years ago

    by Princess of snow

    Wow, this is an absolute amazing piece.
    This type of poetry is pretty nice, I should try
    writing a Triolet. I hope you continue to
    write. I love the last line of the poem, it sums
    it up very well. This deserves a 5/5!

  • 16 years ago

    by Somber Esprit

    Sweet poem. really well written and you tackled the style flawlessly. very enjoyable read. loved it.

  • 16 years ago

    by nikki

    I love this type of poetry. i have never tried writing one myself. i dont think i'd know how. but you nailed it. loved it 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Great job on your Triolet.
    Take Care Cindy