Comments : An escape

  • 10 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    This was so touchy and so great emotional feelings.
    i think you are a great writer, i mean one of the best one here on P&Q

    another 5/5 from me...

  • 10 years ago

    by Dark Reaper

    Hell that was geat. I mean wonderful. Everything came form the heart. Words went straight to my heart soooooo touching. Were did you learn to write so good? I wish that maybe some time way in the future i can write at least half as good as you! Loved it 5/5 form me.

  • 10 years ago

    by Nix

    Wow, I think WOW. I absolutely love it, well done! Are you going to write a book cause this is incredible and very powerful entry. I enjoyed reading it, it has superb atmosphere and great imagery.

  • 10 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Wow! Very descriptive and the imagery was amazing.
    You really have a talent in creative writing. I can't wait to read more.

    5/5

    -Shannon <3

  • 10 years ago

    by Lonely Little Dreamer

    Good short little story. Its got great descriptions and paints a good picture..love imagery. The emotion was definitely present as well..Good job!

  • 10 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    A smile crept over her face a sparkle shown in her eyes the depth of this world touched her core.
    ^^^ That doesn't make sense. I suggest you reword it.

    I like this entry, although I don't technically like how complex you try to make it. Sometimes, things are best simple, and it seems you tried, when writing this, to get too complex and, yet, it seems, it IS fluent. I don't know how quite you did it.

    It made some sense, but it seems as if the description was almost perfect, yet a teensy-little bit too much, with no background information. You don't know about the character, only her emotion. Interesting, but not always the best way to go.
    You don't know about why she is feeling what she is feeling, but you know what she's feeling...
    I like how at the end, she realizes it was all just a dream, but it seems as if there wasn't enough dreaming, wasn't enough imagination.
    It didn't seem to fit.

    However, I like how you opened up the setting, as the nobody; When you ended it, that nobody because a somebody. A somebody with dreams. A somebody with emotions, with feelings, with passion and lust.

    Well connected, though it could be due for a few revisions, but all in all it was a good short piece.

    Good job.

    5/5
    ~Stephen White

  • 10 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Wow.
    That was amazing.
    You're a really great writer. The imagery was vivid & descriptive, the wording was powerful, && the emotions were strong. Lovely job. :]] 5.5

    - Stephanie Lynn .+.

  • 10 years ago

    by Sarah

    Wow..so beautiful..really touchin..
    Loved it

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Disaster

    Wow!
    this was by far the best thing i have ever read
    your words were perfect and i could relate to the emotion within those amazing words
    I have to say out of all your poems I’ve read this is simply my favorite
    xox
    --Jess

  • 10 years ago

    by Kyle

    Wow, that was great!!! good job and i liked how you say the shadows drowned out the music, very awesome how you put this together. good job! 10/5 lol

  • 10 years ago

    by Jstuckie

    W0W THiS iS G00D
    Y0U WRiTE VERY WELL
    ;]
    -MiCHELLE
    {5/5}
    *(C0MMENT BACK)*

  • 10 years ago

    by the song writer

    This is an amazing piece of art...keep it up.

  • 10 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    That was simply amazing! 5/5.

  • 10 years ago

    by Dark Reaper

    It was amazing!!! A great entry to start a book that i know is going to be great. Keep it up 5/5 form me.

  • 9 years ago

    by RobinAnn13

    I liked this one. It builds up the emotions and then the reader realizes it's a dream. I enjoyed reading it, it was very creative and original. ^.^ 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Abu3li

    Really so touchy n breaking

  • 9 years ago

    by Blissful

    This was just beautiful! I loved how your words lured me into another world. The vocabulary you used was flawlessly wonderful and the flow was amazing. I am curious to read more if this does become a book. Well done *5/5*

  • 9 years ago

    by FridusBlueheaven

    I really amazed with the imagery of this poem. It is very descriptive and well written too. This job worth 5/5!!!

  • 9 years ago

    by ABake

    Wow.
    [sarcastic voice]
    The whole thing was amazing and then you totally dumped it at the end. Lol. I was like holy crap this is beautiful && you end it like that? Jk. Jk.

    But it was great and definintly intrigued me. Great job!
    5.5

    Amber..

  • 9 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Hmm very nice story and great expressing all those words.. all the concept and the structures are very great! i love the whole stanza actually it has a deep meaning and the story was portrayed very well.. great job 5/5