Comments : Nothingness (Haiku)

  • 10 years ago

    by Marjan

    This all of us probably know. but still, you worded it really well Gem! :) I liked it =)

    Marjan x

  • 10 years ago

    by Cindy

    Gem
    You always do so great with your poetry forms. I have learned so much from you.
    Great job!
    Take Care
    Love Cindy

  • 10 years ago

    by chavii

    Great write, in few words you have packed lot of beauty.

    Take care
    chavii.

  • 10 years ago

    by Reminders Torture

    I like the style of this poem, The word choice, Everything was done great.
    Take care <3

  • 10 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    Wow..I love all the nature poems and haikus are the best about it
    And you really managed to do it in just 3 lines
    The wording was so smooth about poem and describes alot

    Keep writing Gem,
    And take care
    Laura

  • 10 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    I normally don't like haikus, but this one said a lot for such few words. You did a great job, Gem!
    Charisma*

  • 10 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    Gem,
    This was a wonderful Haiku. It is very well worded and inspirational as well. Great job.
    Kay

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This is awesome...beautiful and elegantly written, and filled with so much depth and meaning, I found this to be very profound.

  • 10 years ago

    by Nix

    Greatly written, it is simple but very powerful. You created excellent atmosphere with just a few words. Word unknown is good for this piece, anyway great job!

  • 10 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    This was an interesting piece..I`ve always loved Haikus and I did indeed love this, it really struck a cord with me. The only thing I could think of that could be changed is the section where you have placed the poem..I think it fits more into inspirational. Anyways,

    5.5
    :]

  • 10 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    This was a wonderful haiku. There was much beauty in so few words. 5/5

    marcella

  • 10 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    I think that this one was better than you other as it lead to more open thoughts for the reader to understand. xxx alex xxx

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    I like Haiku, I think some people are fooled by its seemingly simplistic style, it's not always easy to fill those 3 lines and have meaning, I think you did a really nice job here. An enjoyable piece.

  • 9 years ago

    by Kelsie

    I think we are all afriad of the unknown, but ur right man, we should not fear it Right on.

  • 8 years ago

    by Teria

    Once again, not relaxing or joyful. Refreshing, but not so much with hope, rather faith.

    This haiku I notice isn't traditional. It doesn't really go along with nature, rather human nature - fear. And, you have a long run on sentence rather than 2 parts to it. I read an article once about traditional haikus and 'breaking rules'. And, ever since I've enjoyed reading haikus with 'broken rules'. I find them fun and exciting, lol.

    It's a good thing though, that you're able to pull it off without messing it up. (:

    And, I noticed the time. (: I used to keep the time on my poetry. But I started writing one after another, and I was so afraid my inspiration would go that I didn't write the time. And, I gave up after that. Lol. :/