Great job putting this story to verse. Excellent from begining to end. The imagery was great.
Take Care Cindy

I have to agree with cindy the imagery in this pieace was amazing I loved the twist at the ending it really gave this poem depth.

Amazing as always.It really holds your attention thoughout it and I agree the imagery was great.Yet another 5/5.
Keep it up, -Miranda

Wow..That was really good. The imagery was so amazing, I felt like I could see myself just watching them...It was a great piece...The vocab was just incredible also..

Really good job..

5/5

Your poem was a great one..honestly im jealous of your words. why? they're too deep..it grabs the readers attention well as it did to me..well keep it up..im expecting for new one..5/5 for it..

Wow, another great poem by you.
again you have done a great job on writing your feelings as a great poem.

another 5/5 from me as you truly deserve it

This is an amazing poem. i loved every single bit of it. once i started reading it i had to finish reading. It is so amazing. it really grabs at the readers attention. It is an absolutely amazing poem. it deffineterly deserves more then a 5.

Kalee

I really love this title, that alone drags me in, you did a very nice job on this piece, good work!

The story line was amazing. The poem made me speachless, it has so much meaning in it. Great Job 5/5

Great poem. Some parts remind me of us, like how she gets on her tip toes. lol.
keep writing great poetry.
love Jake

Amazing story mixture with a poem. So much beauty yet such sadness too. 5/5

The imagery was great, the flow was awesome, and i loved everything about this, truly magical.
Love Tara-Kay
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The imagery you created here was beautiful, really blew me away.
I loved the metaphor you used, and I found the whole piece to be original and unqiue in concept...beautifully done.

Wow, Elaine. Simply wow. You did such an amazing job with this poem that I can't even put it into words. I haven't ever read a poem like this before. It's so unique and filled with so much emotion. At first everything just flowed smoothly then the noble came and heated things up. All of a sudden you find yourself being hit with a harsh truth. Oh my god, I loved it! Way to go Elaine.. I would give this poem a 6/5 if I could, but lets just settle for a 5/5 for now =) Love ya girlie!! Keep up the kick @$$ job!! 5/5 <3 <3 <3 <3

~Kayla~

Like a fairytale with the not so happily ever after.
Every girl has had a similar experience like this before both metaphorically and also in line with the daydreams of reality.

Loved it nonetheless. xxx

Very sad yet intriguing tale! I love the imaginary..it makes it an enoyable read and I love the metaphor. Beautiful and very talented writing!!

5.5**
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The imagery in this piece is amazing. It was unique and flowed beautifuly. The metaphor was great as well. Wonderful write. 5/5

marcella

Wow,the story within it was so really breathtaking and your imaginery was so great
I like story filled poems and I liked so much this one

Keep it up paula my friend,
Laura

Wow this was amazing! it was so beautiful and it painted a wonderful picture in my mind. i must say my dear you are quite a talented writter...keep it up!
5/5 coming from me...
BabyGurl

This poem was amazing, I could picture every stanza, every event. You have an amazing talent as I think I said on the other comment. Keep up the great work!