The Eternal Vow

by IdTakeABulletForYou   Sep 7, 2007


Thine eyes burst clouds of white and blue;
a passion which I never knew.
I dreamt of all; I found you, love,
and dreams I never had dreamed of.

I take this pledge to hold your heart
--a love of which shall not depart.
Your soul shall fuel, thine heart shall fill;
and our love is length'd at will.

Thy heart shall never near demise,
Nor shall I ever tend detest;
I'll cherish the heart that I hold in these hands;
I shall not be the finest, but I'll do my best.

A dream we live, a dream we'll be;
forever we'll live peacefully.
A simple existence twined softly and purely;
Eternally blissful. Eternity: Surely.

And even buried in the ground,
we'll be the love that did surround;
It will not wither, ne'er shall die;
this love I shall not jeopardize.

I'll make sure I tend to this love,
and hope for bloom seasonally.
When all goes wrong, we still shall love;
When all goes wrong, you'll be with me.

This vow is inked in gold on parchment
that shall never burn nor tear.
All the future holds is us;
We've searched so long, we're almost there.

I vow to take you as my own,
to kiss thy lips, precious and treasured.
Always ever, I shall vow
to bear a love that can't be measured.

Here, upon this moment...
Here, standing alone,
I vow to, the next instant,
stand with you forevermore.

Our hands are good as fastened;
Our signatures are signed.
I vow, this very second,
to entwine your soul with mine.

900 poems, and plenty more to come!

Thanks for reading, and I hope you enjoyed =]

Please comment/vote honestly and accordingly,

~Stephen White

(Copyright 2007- StephenWhite)

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  • 16 years ago

    by Lisa

    Congrats on your 900th poem:)
    this wasan exceptionally written poem
    i loved the beginnins stanza,got me hooked to read the full poem right away
    great work,honestly and i hope to see more of your work in the future:)
    takecare
    Lisa

  • 16 years ago

    by Tiffany

    That was really powerful and i loved it!

  • 16 years ago

    by Sarah Overpeck

    I really like this!!!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    Congratulation Steven! 900 Thats Awesome!

    First of all.. Your poem's are always overwhelming for me, Your talent is so immense my small mind can't comprehend. However I love reading them, there just so good:)

    'Thine eyes burst clouds of white and blue;
    a passion which I never knew.
    I dreamt of all; I found you, love,
    and dreams I never had dreamed of.'

    ^ This was an excellent way too start, it really captured my attention.

    'A dream we live, a dream we'll be;
    forever we'll live peacefully.
    A simple existence twined softly and purely;
    Eternally blissful. Eternity: Surely.'

    ^This stanza was so sweet and full of love, the word's penned perfectly.

    'And even buried in the ground,
    we'll be the love that did surround;
    It will not wither, ne'er shall die;
    this love I shall not jeopardize.'

    ^This stanza brought tear's to my eye's, so faithful, and to love someone so much, so rare. You portrayed in touchingly.

    I also liked the last three stanza's.
    All beautiful, all touching, all filled with love.
    I love how you ended this.

    You did and amazing job,
    and as I knew I would I loved your 900th
    poem.

    Keep writting,
    5/5 Elaine.

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    First of all congrats on your 900 poem, that is really impressing!

    This poem looks little forced, I must say. This is just my opinion, but it doesn't really seems that you put your self in to this piece. I think, it holds a lot emotions but you have many mistakes. You used same words too many times and that really leaves bad impression. It has some great and effective lines but others aren't really good. Sorry but I think that you could write this one a lot better. I won't rate it but it doesn't really deserves 5/5. It is far from bad, it is good poem but for your 900 piece it must be better. Once again this is just my opinion.

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