Interesting write. i loved the message at the end. title was also captivating. wasn't sure how it was going to turn out considering your a male writing from a females experience yet it stilled worked out well. i have to say it's by far the longest poem i have read on this site. a nice change to see a longer thought process and self change in the persona. i can tell you thought this one out well. i love the juxtopisiton displayed. i also like the person you wrote in. as if you we were listening to a conversation between you and the girl that this happened to. helped add authenticity and maybe even provoke a tone of personal reflection with some responders. well done xoxo

oh and thanks for the pm

Excellent! There were some areas where it was off but the pros made up for the cons so I give you a five. :) Long poem but wonderful.

Amazing....i loved it..u kept my attention thro the whole thing...very well written...awesome work...~*~CINDY~*~