Your word choice was briallnt, and the vocab was amazing, the flow was flawless, and the imagery vivd, and real, you did an excellent job here, your words spoke volumes to my soul, and painted clear and vivd images in my mind, the seems to be no room for improvement here, keep up the good work 5/5

Well penned you portrait here, flow well yet good rhyme. Simply yet well expressed emotions...."Life is like an onion, you peel off one layer at a time and sometimes you weep. Following the path of least resistance is what makes rivers and men crooked." Awesome!

Wow, whole piece is so unique and excellently written. It contains great choice of words and superbly created imagery. Whole poem is very deep, it has very good metaphors.
My favorite stanza is:

-Cool winds caress my skin;
And, the smell of grass and water spins
My head until I whimper down
Into the soft serenading ground. -

I like the ending very much, it's very effective, especially the last line.
Keep up, 5/5 from me :)

It has a chiling atmosphere and interesting topic
I liked the flow...your word usage was simply amazing
My fave lines are;

And, of the silver waves, a roaring,
Bring the moisture to me; soaring.
And, in this silent nightly meeting,
The winds will give me their last greeting.

Keep it up,
Laura

I thought it was pretty good. I'll give it a four. There were some parts where I felt there was an added word here or there that didn't fit. Other than that it was pretty fun to imagin it. You used so many different words, to imagin it was as if I was Alice in Wonder Land putting together the pieces of vision.

Great write!!!
Really amazing words.
Keep up the good work.

God bless u

" And, of the silver waves, a roaring,
Bring the moisture to me; soaring. "

My favorite part of the poem, by far.
You have a very creative way of writing.
I haven't read something quite like that in awhile.
The emotion and depth were well placed throughout,
and the flow you displayed was wonderfully done.
I'm very glad I had a chance to read this one,
It is going on my favorites. :]

Outstanding imagery and flow in this inspiring poem

This is beautiful. The imagery you portrayed in this was breathtaking, it created very vivid pictures in my mind. The flow is good throughout and the word choice was classy and elegant...beautifully written.

Excellent! Your use of imagery was well placed! 5/5

Very beautifully written. Excellent piece you have here. The imagery was peacefull and soothing. Excellent word choice and the flow was perfect. Well done on this piece!

Excellent!

truly inspiring, i like the style and the uniqueness of it! well penned and nice flow of words!

keep it up!

This seemed like a very cold poem. Yet very descriptive.. and full of meaning. Kind of like an anology hidden behind words? I'm nore really sure
I enjoyed the flow, vocabulary, everything.
Brilliant mate.

"The conscious world is now fleeting,
And all the meadow is now sleeping.
I dream of rising with the sun;
And, me, to be, with the meadow; one. "

Simply wonderful!.... your vocabulary was great and the flow was just great!...

these are the type of poems that i like.The ones where i can really feel the emotion.

gratz on the job well done!

Awesome poem. nice flow

Very descriptive and great use of words! I really enjoyed reading this..Excellent Poem!

5.5**
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Vocabulary is wonderful and its quite descriptive. Is there a hidden meaning in this? Because if there if, I'm not smart enough to figure it out, LOL. Anyway, great job, and I have to mention i LOVE the second stanza.
Keep it up!
5/5
~Lainey

The rhyming is brilliant.
the poem over all is amazing as well.
keep it up.
you have talent.
<3jess