Very sad poem. i find it such a disappointing trend to see how many families consist of broken and lost relationships.

the line

Finding new arms of passion sin.

i can't help but feel that it needs and extra word or a semi colon between passion sin

my favourite line being

For she cannot miss what was never there.

well done

I love this poem, it really speaks the truth.

I enjoyed it..so breathtaking and so emotional..i can feel the thoughts..rhymes so well!

keep it up!

Wow..it was so sorrowful and sad..I liked your descriptions of life so much..And your title did pretty much things with poem

Keep it up,
Laura

This is amazing. made me think. my parents are divorced. so i only get to see dad once in a while. this hits the nail in the head. good job. keep on writing. :)

Abosultely very well penned poem, it blew me away... adifferent kind story broken hearted story though i know it still exist in family, it was really sad and painful. i like the description, chosen words and metaphors you used in this.. a lfawless poem. Keep it up

What can I say? This poem has so many fantastic images and metaphors and the language/wording is superb. But it is the meaning and the emotion contained within that are almost heart-breaking and seep into the reader's soul. This is a great poem, truly.

Peace, Poetry & Power,

Gary Jurechka

The emotion in this piece was amazing. Each line was beautiful penned with wonderful descriptions and a flawless flow. Great write.
5/5

marcella

This is beautiful and so deep! 5/5

Such a sad and emotional write. The worst part of it all is that there are too many circumstances in our world that fit this all too easily.

You have done a wonderful job and the flow seemed right on. I really enjoyed reading this.

--Sher

Great poem, well written, i really liked it.

Wow, this gave me goosebumps, this is really really well written, 5/5 really good job.

Fantastic.

I love the lines "A little girl, a shell you find. Forced to become an adult before her time."

This is very powerful, and I like the wordplay involved. Excellent stuff!

This poem shares many expressions from the heart
If this is how you grew up this is very sad
Its a shame people do this to there families
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Im very sorry for all this but writeing poetry is a great way to express urself! 5/5

I really enjoyed this piece. The ending I did not expect but i think that it worked

my fav line was

"For she cannot miss what was never there. "

*single pair of hands applaude you* That was truly amazing. The word choice and the vocabulay spoke voulmes to my soul, blowing me away, the emtion was powerful ,and deep, I could almost feel the pain, the imagery was vivid and real, it painted pictures in my head, perfect flow, perfect write, you dida pervect job 5/5

It is interesting, I like the idea of this poem and atmosphere is very touching. I don't like few lines because they aren't good like the rest of the poem.

Amazing 5/5

This is so sad, know exactly how you feel, the last stanza was VERY good, loved it, again flawless flow and grammer, i give it a 5/5!!!

You're an amazing writer.
Creative, the imagery was clear and brilliant.
You definitely stirred emotions in me.
Your flow was flawless, and you have a great gift.