Comments : Am I still alive

  • 10 years ago

    by I Love You

    This poem is sad, but theres a lot of emotion in it. great job on it 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by X Kashies Misery X

    There are a lot of spelling mistakes that kinda make this poem not as affective as it should be. It has a really good sense and story to it, and I would love to see it expressed more powerfuller.....I think that at the end how you linked it to someone saving you, it was ur fellow brother?.....are you meaning God?....
    cause if so, it's not clear enough, and you should say it more, if you are linking it to that idea, al though personally, I think it would be really cool ifyou were to be reachedout to and that person saying your safe, but then you realize that person is odd and it's atcually the fact that you've fallen into the wrong hands, now that would be truely awsum!

    good work though, I like your idea