Unknowing Entrapment

by *Charisma*   Sep 24, 2007


A young heart still untainted
By desires not quite pure
Felt a wrestling inside
Filled with questions left unsure

His slow and steady manner
Ate through years of innocence.
She knew what he wanted then,
And it made her stomach tense.

He let her think she wasn't
His type, not his kind of girl.
The jealousy inside her
Let him enter in her world.

A woman she would appear,
Someone he couldn't resist.
She wouldn't be seen a child
And for sure, not in his midst.

His years were twice that of hers.
To them both it was a game.
Certain lines she would not cross,
But those she did left her shame.

What kills her naive heart most
Is falling into his hands.
All the walls she had built up
Came crumbling down like sand.

It's obvious she's hurting.
He probably doesn't know.
She chose to walk on a road
That left her nowhere to go.

For months, she will remember
Every moment of her past,
How one man could destroy
The standards she'd set so fast.

What was for her protection
Shattered within is blue eyes
Reminding her, temptation
Comes in a clever disguise.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    -What kills her naive heart most
    Is falling into his hands.
    All the walls she had built up
    Came crumbling down like sand.-
    ^This stanza is incredibly written

    Rhyming seem forced and it is very typical. You could use some metaphors for better expressions of emotions. I like the topic pretty much but some parts and lines threw me off and don't make sense, leaving the reader unclear with what you tried to say. Like:
    -And it made her stomach tense.- this description ruins whole context of the second stanza.
    This isn't bad poem but it needs some changes and corrections.

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    Wow. The ending was very very good, dear.
    But other than the last three or four stanzas [[where it said twice her years ]] I wasn't too fond of it. The flow just through me off, and I was kind of out of it, because of the poem.
    I didn't want to continue reading.
    Though, I'm glad I did becase.. the ending si amazing.

    (: