Excepting the absence of an occasional space between some groups of lines which really Would help one to See what you're saying more vividly and rhythmically,I really am enjoying your work and filling up with one enormous meal at a time..See what I mean?
special appreciation for the following:
"it's all sixes and sevens with nothing left here,
a lack of fight that left me without a drop to drink.
i'm floating through the apathy without a license
because i couldnt drive right now, let alone think"