I think this is the best poem I have ever read from you. It doesn't show much emotion, but in this piece, it's not needed. Your use of vocab and imagery, as well as how you used your words, rhyme and flow is amazing. I honestly can't find anything wrong with this.
I'm glad to see you back David, I've definately missed your poetry.
Well done. =]
5/5

Tammie xo

David!

How nice to see you posting again!
I hope you are doing fine, sweetie.
This poem is beautiful, like very single poem you have ever made.
Take care, my sweet friend and good luck on your exams!

xoxo,

Ingrid

This poems is so realistic!!

I'm sorry

Your poem rocks, for real! The imagery was impressive! 5/5

Great job David. It is so nice to see you writing again.
Take Care cindy

This is terrific david, youve accurately captured battle throughout the ages, great descriptive style.again i like the title. it brings out the injustice. and it rhymes!go david. rachael says yes. ok not really.

This really describes what really happens in a battle, it's not all glory and everything, it's sadness. even though this poem is really good, i think you could make it alot better if you made it longer, so that it would have more of an ending. 5/5
gabriella

Words fail me!
what a divine poem. (the last stanza is my favorite.) im a fan of the dark poem genre.
5/5

(P.s. your display picture is hilarious. it is the sort of thing i'd say. XD.
xxx

Wow that was really well written i liked it
your a good writer!

I really like this poem of yours it is very good..