Fear

by The Sky is Falling   Oct 2, 2007


Let me take your hand
Take you down the withered path
Show you world of love and desire
Give you everything you want.
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I'm slowly sinking in the quicksand
Drowning fast in the bath
Burning up in consent fire
Not having you anymore, is nothing I want.
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Missing you is now a waste
Pain laces threw my veins
You don't care anymore
Nothing was lost to you in this war
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I get nothing in my time of need
Besides this bowl of weed
Turning to drugs and alcohol
Running like a crack adict into a wall.
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My breathing slows, I almost can't hear
Blurry eyes, trying to see past the tears
Heart stopping, my face showing my fears
Life lost at this last year.

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  • 11 years ago

    by lost and incomplete

    I love this poem , the only one to have expressed all I've been feeling for the past few months

  • 14 years ago

    by AGirlWorthFightingFor

    Addict is two ds, but that's okay, you have shown your powerful command of language, again, and again
    ever try non-rhyming poems?

  • I loved it. The emotion was shown.
    Your a talented writer.

    "I'm slowly sinking in the quicksand
    Drowning fast in the bath
    Burning up in consent fire
    Not having you anymore, is nothing I want."

    My favourite stanza.
    Keep writing, 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by jLegendc

    "My breathing slows, I almost can't hear
    Blurry eyes, trying to see past the tears
    Heart stopping, my face showing my fears
    Life lost at this last year."

    I liked how you ended ur poem... it's really depressing and touching at the same time... your story is quite sad like mine... the way you've written it really struck me.. anywayz.. great poem! =]

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    I don't like rhyming too much, it seems forced and I think that this poem could be even better if you didn't rhyme in any stanza.
    Other than that excellently done, second stanza is my favorite one and whole poem is written with a lot passion and greatly described sadness and strong emotions. You did good job, bravo!