Comments : Fear

  • 16 years ago

    by JustKristina

    Ohh.. so sad!!! i like the way it flows though.. and i kept me reading.. wanting more!!! i love it!! keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by Boy

    Wow. it was graet poem . i loved it. you are a good writer.

  • It's really sad, but good. Is it something you've 'experianced' or something from your mind?

  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Wow. Very well written, I could feel the emotion in this through your imagery and wording. Without strong imagery and wording, it would have been hard to follow I think, but it wasn`t, so great job on that.

    5.5
    :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Sarah

    This poem is beautiful, in such a sad,moving way
    you have incredible talent, it must be said :)
    5/5
    take care, sarah x.o.x

  • 16 years ago

    by rocker666chick

    I love the part about addiction because most of teens turn to it....i don't know I can really feel from it
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    The flow was very well done.
    Emotion, depth.. both very good.
    A nice job on this one.
    Overall Rating: 4.6/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Corruption

    Great poem
    you wrote this well
    i like the story to it
    well good job
    hope to read more sometime
    and thx for the comment
    Keenan

  • 16 years ago

    by Pamela G

    I feel sad after read this poem. Great work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Roxy

    Awww, such a deep poem I loved the third stanza the most I would have to say..No idea why =S somthing about it just caught my attention Lol!! xxxx Keep up the great writing xxx Love Roxeh

  • 16 years ago

    by June

    This touched my heart ,it was sad yet so beauifully done and I can relate to how you must be feeling.Very well done.

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    I don't like rhyming too much, it seems forced and I think that this poem could be even better if you didn't rhyme in any stanza.
    Other than that excellently done, second stanza is my favorite one and whole poem is written with a lot passion and greatly described sadness and strong emotions. You did good job, bravo!

  • 16 years ago

    by jLegendc

    "My breathing slows, I almost can't hear
    Blurry eyes, trying to see past the tears
    Heart stopping, my face showing my fears
    Life lost at this last year."

    I liked how you ended ur poem... it's really depressing and touching at the same time... your story is quite sad like mine... the way you've written it really struck me.. anywayz.. great poem! =]

  • I loved it. The emotion was shown.
    Your a talented writer.

    "I'm slowly sinking in the quicksand
    Drowning fast in the bath
    Burning up in consent fire
    Not having you anymore, is nothing I want."

    My favourite stanza.
    Keep writing, 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by AGirlWorthFightingFor

    Addict is two ds, but that's okay, you have shown your powerful command of language, again, and again
    ever try non-rhyming poems?

  • 11 years ago

    by lost and incomplete

    I love this poem , the only one to have expressed all I've been feeling for the past few months