Oh, Darling, Darling, How You Make Me Sick

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Oct 2, 2007


You can call me sweetheart and baby I'll call you a mistake,
There's nothing worse than a defective smile and eyes that are fake.
That silicon is cracking around your face; you're not that pretty anymore
With a defective smile and having no higher expectations than being a wh[]re.
Oh, those dimples tell so many lies you're trying to hide, and fail to do so,
I can see right through those button eyes and those sexual innuendos -
Oh, Darling, Darling, how you make me sick.

With careful decision we could pin your weaknesses and shoot your undeserved ego down;
That path is falling away, but I'll never break a promise; I'll shake this bitter town.
And just like all your lies, you'd think it was a drug, you overdosed long ago,
Let's drink to your honor, Gorgeous; to miss your esteem we'll have to aim low.
Oh, when you flirt with those girls, regret fills your mouth and it's more than you can chew,
And by the way, I just really wanted to say, "You're not worth my time, and f[]ck you."
Oh, Darling, Darling, how you make me sick.

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  • 16 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Stanza one-
    "You can call me sweetheart and baby I'll call you a mistake"
    Wow, I love how the first line pulls you in straight away. It sorta feels like you really are speaking to the reader and not just telling a story. I really liked that about his poem.
    I wasn't really into the repetition of "defective smile" but I guess you repeated it to get it across. I found it was strong the first time and repeated it sorta lost its edge.
    I loved how you brought the title into the end of the stanza. & I loved the title, Really eye catching.

    Stanza two-
    "I'll shake this bitter town."
    I'm not sure why but I really liked the way you worded this. Really stuck out, to me.
    "regret fills your mouth and it's more than you can chew,"
    I love this line, my favourite of the poem.
    again you repeated the title and I thought it wrapped it up nicely.

    I love how your poems contain very long sentences, & Have a lot going on. But still seem to flow perfectly and make sense.
    I loved this one, a lot. <33

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    You had a lot of spot in this poem that was just great then on the other hands some ned to be reajusted. I liked the poem overall but I think some spaces needed work. Good job anyways.
    Plot121

  • 16 years ago

    by LiViNg To DiE

    AMAZING!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Dara McCraw

    Wow

  • 16 years ago

    by Prophecies In Kodak

    I can taste the resentment and anger. Literally.

    You did good.
    It's hard to keep up with your poetry.

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