Comments : I can hurt you too

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSuicidalxx

    Good poem, sad, Very Well written!

  • 16 years ago

    by TillyMariex

    Wow. simply amzing like always love <333
    i got new ones up. comment some?

  • 16 years ago

    by XDeesxToxicxCookiesX

    Hey good poem or u can say super good...sounds wrong lol
    i <3 it =]

  • 16 years ago

    by x.Athame.x

    I like the idea behind it, and the overall theme I suppose would be a good word. There were points in it where the words seemed forced and the flow broke a bit but all in all very good. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Short and sweet poem with the intended content and meaning. You could write a comma here "if it was, we'd be together". This one is great 5/5

    Tc
    Fsams

  • 16 years ago

    by Miranda

    Great poem.Alot of emotion.I love how you ended it.It's great to see a poem about hurting the person back instead of just everyone saying,oh he/she hurt me so much,what can I do? unno?
    Anyway great piece of poetry.
    Keep writing,
    Miranda

  • 16 years ago

    by awww

    Damn i love the message.. this is my absolute fave part:

    I guess you never thought
    I could hurt you too

    dang.. really like the thought of this piece.. something people dont write about much.. usually it would be about being the victim.. but this is just great.. like it so much.. *bow down*

    ~angel~

  • 16 years ago

    by Ariana

    I liked this, I can relate. It's poetic but with little subtleties of revenge entwined within it. nice write.

  • 16 years ago

    by HidinVictim

    Wow this is really good please check my stuff out and tell me wat you think

  • 16 years ago

    by HaileyHelen

    Im sry! this poem was very sad! it touched my heart! great work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Normal is the Watchword

    What I found to stand out was one line in particular: "but I evened it out a little/to make myself feel better" It kinda had a humour feeling to the poem, kind of uplifted it for a moment and left me wondering what exactly had been done to even things out a little. But that is something you did not finish like a though unsaid. The rest of the poem concludes with a vague imply of what was done and I hope you might rewrite this one day to give us that hint of revenge and the true hurt that caused it to happen.

  • 16 years ago

    by HidinVictim

    WOW.. that really hit home for me right now, that was really good and i loved the emotion behind every word very well written

    keep writing... 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Alexa Eudis

    Oh the bitter and angst and revenge! i love it! its so harsh but so perfect!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Love it....

    the whole concept was amazing... its a "in your face take that" kind of poem lol.

    you did a good job.the flow was good and the rhyming was too..i didnt have to pause at all.

    good job.5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Aww, I thought it was going to be a dark poem about really hurting someone *pouts* I'm in need of some really dark poetry. Anyways, I thought it was pretty good. Maybe you should make it long and go into more details about how you actually hurt him. I think the last stanza was the best, it was more heart-felt. Good job!

    Keep writing!
    Cayce