Comments : I Want to Be Me

  • 16 years ago

    by ABake

    Aww. This was sad but to be honost I, as the reader did not feel a lot of emotion. The flow was flawless and overall was a great peice.

    Amber...

  • 16 years ago

    by Pete

    I've just read the comment above, and I disagree completely. It displays alot of emotion thoughtout the entire piece. I think because its about a break up i expected to feel sad and disheartened .. yet i didn't - that's not to say i felt no emotion in it. To me it comes across as if it was written with resignation. The empathy comes into it because it seems the desolation is inevitable.
    Nearly everyone has been in a relationship like this one; it just isn't supposed to be.

    I love the impression it gives to me. V. nice work.
    [5/5]
    ~Pete.