I Submit; I Deny!

by Shokry Al Qubati   Oct 6, 2007


High and high.. above the sky

Another Moon is seen by I

Nice about it, I am, but why?

As if it is, to me, my eyes!

Now, come down to earth, and sigh

She is the Moon?! I Submit; I Deny!

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  • 12 years ago

    by Poet Keen

    I like every single rhymes you compose

  • 12 years ago

    by Poet Keen

    I like every single rhymes you compose

  • 13 years ago

    by Chocolate Addict

    Sorry I have to disagree with the previous comments given to you, I think that this poem is pretty childish.I don't know why you like to put '!' at the end of some of the sentences. Almost majority of the words are repeated in your previous poems. It's just to predictable on what rhyme is going to be in the next sentence.

    She is the Moon?! I Submit; I Deny!

    ^^^
    This doesn't make sense at all, what do you mean, by you submit then you deny?Seems like you are contradicting yourself.

    Well then again I guess it's forgivable as English is not your main language.

    No hard feelings, but the truth is, I can tell you all the beautiful lies you want to hear but it would only let you write within your own comfort zone, cause nobody dares to tell you that this piece it no where near a 3rd grade standard.

  • 14 years ago

    by Biya

    Very nice poem

  • 14 years ago

    by Mimed Lovette

    Wow, it's amazing how a short poem managed to bring across such strong emotions. Commendable effort!