Comments : Butterfly Kisses

  • 10 years ago

    by 1Mistake

    Woah! how awesome was that!! I loved it good work!!

    *X-Buggy-X*

  • 10 years ago

    by chavii

    Awwwww so beautiful and cute poem, like our child fantasies in which we live, i have fallen in love with it !!
    Bravo!

  • 10 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    Awww! I love fairytale poems! You did a great job!
    Charisma*

  • 10 years ago

    by Deana

    This is beautiful Gem,It takes me back to being a little girl at an amusement park.Wouldn`t it be great if the world could really be this way. excellent work!

  • 10 years ago

    by Nix

    Wow, quite impressing piece, it has fantastic topic and you created truly excellent atmosphere in it. Rhythm is really beautiful in whole poem and it has great message. Good imagery is mixed with superbly described emotions, really deep. Rhyming is also totally unique and refreshing. Well done! I really can't chose favorite stanza, I like them all.

  • 10 years ago

    by Blissful

    How beautiful! I couldnt help but smile all throughout the poem. The language you used was so sweet and the imagery you created was one I yearn to escape too.

    One thing that kinda rubbed me wrong
    "Pixies and fairies are all flying high
    Scattering pixie dust over your head"

    The use of the word pixie twice kinda threw off the flow.

    Well done *5/5*

  • 10 years ago

    by Im In Love What Can I Say

    Wow thats cute i like this ... i like the last stanza it great... 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Viola

    Aww this is just so sweet. I love all that imagery there. It really paint a beautiful picture in my mind.
    This stanza especially is just wonderful:

    "The glitter carousel is waiting to start
    Shimmering unicorns beg you to take part
    The organ strikes up a tinkling tune
    About a little cow who jumped over the moon"

    But really the whole thing is so impressive. The flow is good, your choice of words is perfect and so very descriptive. Really made me smile. Great work! =] keep it up.
    --Viola

    p.s. Thanks for the comment on my poem hun. It means a lot. :)

  • 10 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Oh my good word. I`m speechless. This has got to be my favorite from you. Everything about this is just perfect. The imagery, the wording, the story line, the mood, the symbols, metaphors and similes lol...my goodness. This poem is AMAZING.

    5.5
    :]

  • 10 years ago

    by Nebula

    This is so imaginative and descriptive Gem, such beautiful imagery! I can just picture this beautiful place with all this magic happening! Hope you don't mind if I print this out and read it to my kids tonight at bed time... It will probably take at least 10 minutes to get through with all there excited interruptions... 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, this really impress me... So beautiful and descriptive. The imagery that you created is great and so vivid. I like this piece from the beginning to the end, it is very original and creative.
    Your choice of words in it is absolutely fantastic.
    You have true talent!
    Keep up!
    5/5 from me

  • 10 years ago

    by Gamaliel munoz

    Nice lol i saw the title and i had to see it lol you know what funny thow am going to think of this poem next time i kiss some one lol

    LOVE IT

    5\5

  • 10 years ago

    by Pete

    Wonderfully imaginative work. This place sounds like the wonderland all little girls would dream of. Such amazing imagery used throughout.

    It takes such a good imagination to write about something like this. You not only pulled it off amazingly, but made us boys want to visit this place too!

    Just one thing ..
    "Pink candy floss cloads float lazily past"
    should be " Pink candy floss clouds.."

    Wonderful rhyme structure.
    Beautiful imagery.
    Imaginative topic.
    Just simply an amazing piece.

    [6/5] < No Typo

    ~Pete.

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Oh holy crap.
    This is frigging awesome.
    I don't even know what to say...
    Gem, this poem is amazing.
    The content, the concept, imagery wording and flow..they all come together to create a truly beautiful read.
    Your flow is flawless throughout the entire piece, while the opening stanza was beautifully done, it pulls the reader right in and from there it just gets even better.
    There isn't a thing I would change about this.
    Amazing job with this.

  • 10 years ago

    by LenaLee

    Cute poem 5/5 =)

  • 10 years ago

    by Cindy

    Gem
    What a beautiful magical piece you have penned.
    Excellent read to share with the kids.
    I loved it.
    Love Cindy

  • 10 years ago

    by Destinys Pain

    Wow. That was such a nice and cute poem, brought back memories of childhood, I LOVED it! Kepp up the great work :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    There is an amazing sparkle in this poem! It just stands out in a beautiful way! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    OMG ... I just can't find any words to express my feelings ... I gotta put this one in my favourites

  • 10 years ago

    by Dinks Girl

    This is a beautiful poem that my children and I enjoyed very much.