Comments : ONE WISH

  • 16 years ago

    by Gem

    I thought this started off really well, you have all the emotions there and the flow is easy to follow

    "To see who or what brakes your heart,"

    ^ 'breaks' your heart

    "Your straight
    To be the one you could count on,"

    ^ I didn't get this line, straight what?

    "But most important
    Your heart
    To be the reason your alive."

    ^ But that last line was gorge and really set off the poem perfectly.
    You have the makings of a great one here, well done

    *Gem*

  • 16 years ago

    by Kevin

    Amazing

  • 16 years ago

    by J u l e s

    Great poem but one line i didnt really understand is,

    "your striaght
    To be the one you count on"

    care to explain what that means ??